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Reviewer: Darkness Shines (talk · contribs) 14:51, 28 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • DOB is uncited, this source gives DOB as 1971.[1]
Yeah, but seems to be a mirror of wikipedia, as wiki for a long time had 1971 and the sentences are aligned to what was written here.
I doubt it is a mirror, scarecrow is an imprint of Rowman & Littlefield It is an academic publisher. About Us The book is also in it's 4'th edition making it first print run 97, whic his a good few years before this article was written.  Done
  • "He subsequently founded the Basej-i Milli (National Movement) or Afghanistan Green Trend as a pro-democracy and anti-Taliban grassroots movement." Use this reference please[2]  Done This reference can also be used to replace or bolster reference 6 using pp283-285. Also, one for his resigning as I am quite sure Karzai sacked him. See this source.[3] After pressure from Pakistan.[4]
Yes, but officially it was a resignation. The role of Pakistani pressure on Karzai is already mentioned but I will also use the Williams source. Thanks!
  • Renowned political analyst Ahmed Rashid Seems a little much  Done
  • Saleh on the BBC's Hard Talk explained this has no citation, I do see an external to hardtalk however, if this is the interview it ought to be a reference, not an EL  Done
  • Lose ref 10 to CNSnews, I would not call it reliable, and the piece is terribly written[1] Replace it with this one.[5]
Also put The Guardian source. Kept the CNSnews until I find a source which has the "tens of reasons" quote also, ok? Content is not controversial, just a recap of what he said at the resignation press conference in 2010.
  • In the Biography section it mentions the United Front intelligence[who?] Context is needed as there are no link to them.  Done
  • The second usage of reference 1 In 1997, Saleh was appointed to lead Massoud's international liaison office in Dushanbe, Tajikistan, where he served as a coordinator for non-governmental (humanitarian) organizations and as a liaision partner for foreign intelligence agencies. should be sourced to this.[6] Written by this chap [2]  Done
  • The NDS under Saleh were still accused of human rights violations up to 98' and in carrying out renditions for the CIA, needs a mention attributed to Ahmed Rashid[7]
Find this one difficult as there are no evidence for a causal relationship. This is a biography on a living person. Unless someone has brought forward evidence connecting Saleh personally to these instances, that belongs under NDS, not under this biography. Note that the Canadian human rights scandal was specifically about a detention centre in Kandahar (Pashtun heartland), unlikely the Tajik Saleh (even in his position) had influence on that area and centre ruled by Presiden Karzai's brother, Ahmad Wali Karzai. If there are sources explicitly linking Saleh to that, fine, but until now I haven't seen any. See Ahmad Shuja Pasha (current ISI director) or Leon Panetta (fmr. CIA director) as a comparison. Unless these individuals are personally connected or responsible, it is mentioned under the organizations: ISI or CIA or NDS in this case.
Struck out as possible BLP concern.
  • I quite like this The Taliban, and their sponsors in the ISI, had regarded Saleh as their fiercest opponent, something Saleh was enormously proud of.[8] Perhaps work it into the biography section? Attributed to this chap William Dalrymple (historian)  Done
  • 2001-2003 Department One uncited, use this[1]  Done

Review

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
  1. ^ a b Adamec, Ludwig W. (2011). Historical Dictionary of Afghanistan (4th ed.). Scarecrow. p. 378. ISBN 978-0810878150.
  2. ^ Gall, Sandy (2012). War Against the Taliban: Why it All Went Wrong in Afghanistan. Bloomsbury. p. 284. ISBN 978-1408809051.
  3. ^ Ekengren, Magnus (2011). The Politics of Security Sector Reform. Ashgate. p. 234. ISBN 978-1409410287. {{cite book}}: Unknown parameter |coauthors= ignored (|author= suggested) (help)
  4. ^ Williams, Brian Glyn (2011). Afghanistan Declassified: A Guide to America's Longest War. University of Pennsylvania Press. p. 29. ISBN 978-0812244038.
  5. ^ Boone, Jon (6 June 2010). "Afghan interior minister and spy chief resign over jirga security breaches". The Guardian.
  6. ^ Fergusson, James (2010). Taliban. Bantam. p. 215. ISBN 978-0593066355.
  7. ^ Rashid, Ahmed (2009). Descent into Chaos: How the War Against Islamic Extremism is Being Lost in Pakistan, Afghanistan and Central Asia. Penguin. p. 306. ISBN 0141020865.
  8. ^ Dalrymple, William (23 August 2010). "The military and the mullahs". New Statesman.
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