Talk:Ampullae of Lorenzini/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GeoffreyT2000 (talk · contribs) 04:37, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

I will check the criteria now. GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 04:37, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

1a

• Many instances of a comma followed by the word "and" need to be examined to see whether a comma is really needed or not.
  • , and of basal actinopterygians (bony fishes) such as reedfish - removed
  • , and a gel-filled canal (the ampullengang) which opens to the surface by a pore in the skin - needed
  • , and electrical properties similar to a semiconductor - needed
  • , and has a conductivity of about 1.8 mS/cm - needed
  • , and is considered an electroreception specialist - needed
    • Happy to explain why if there's any doubt; in each case, the sense depends on the phrasing.
• Also, there are some other changes that could be made:
  • In the initial sentence Ampullae of Lorenzini (singular Ampulla) are electroreceptors, sense organs able to detect electric fields., it makes sense to replace , sense organs with , i.e., sense organs that are.
    • In my book that adds nothing useful: just makes the sentence longer. Perhaps this is a British English thing.
  • In Electrophysiological experiments in the 20th century suggested a sensibility to temperature, mechanical pressure, and possibly salinity under the "History" section, one could eliminate the adverb "possibly" without changing the meaning.
    • No, salinity was and is much more doubtful than the other listed parameters. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:50, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 05:01, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

So, then there are no other fixes that need to be made (except for a minor correction where the word "and" was mistakenly removed instead of the comma). I am going to pass this GAN now. GeoffreyT2000 (talk) 21:25, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 01:24, 25 September 2022 (UTC)