Talk:American black duck/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheSandDoctor (talk · contribs) 05:09, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

I will start this review in a minute. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:09, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you very much for picking it up for a review! Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:49, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Description

• "The head is a slightly lighter brown than the dark brown body" - nothing wrong with this sentence prese, but seems that it could be written better. Again, not really a point, just a suggestion grammar wise. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:40, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Nice suggestion! Does it look better now? Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:49, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Looks better to me now. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 06:53, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• "The cheeks and throat are streaked brown and there is a dark streak..." - how about "The cheeks and throat are streaked brown, with a dark streak..."? --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:40, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Definitely better! Rephrased. Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:49, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks again. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 06:53, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• "The fleshy orange feet have dark webs." - seems like it could be put better, perhaps "The fleshy orange feet of the duck have dark webbing" or something along those lines? --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:40, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Rephrased. Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:49, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Feeding

• "...80% plant food and 20% animal food, which increases to 85% during winter." - what/which one increases to 85% in the winter? Seems a bit ambiguous. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 16:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Oh yeah! Awesome catch. Surely, one might have thought 85% for the plant diet, but it is otherwise. Rephrased. Adityavagarwal (talk) 17:04, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Breeding

• "Nest sites are well-concealed on the ground, often on uplands." - shouldn't that be "in uplands"? --TheSandDoctor (talk) 16:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Woops, fixed! Adityavagarwal (talk) 17:04, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• "...cream white..." - could that just read "cream"? Also, isn't that encompassed/already covered by saying the eggs come in "varied shades of white"? --TheSandDoctor (talk) 16:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

• Yep, removed "creamy white" instead! Adityavagarwal (talk) 17:04, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Will continue review asap --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:40, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

So far the article looks good. I have gone ahead and made some minor copyedits and, as always, feel free to revert them if you disagree. I am going to place this review  On hold pending the alterations above and anything else I happen to notice in the meantime (in which case will add above). --TheSandDoctor (talk) 05:52, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

TheSandDoctor Your edits seem awesome! Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:49, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

@Adityavagarwal: I'm glad that you liked the edits. I have struck out my above points but will give the article a once over in the morning and then most likely pass it as it is getting late and fresh eyes would be a better thing so to speak. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 06:53, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

TheSandDoctor Please take your time! I hope you have a wonderful evening! Adityavagarwal (talk) 06:57, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Adityavagarwal Thank you very much. I have added a few more things and after they have been addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this review. I have also looked at the images and they are all fine. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 16:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

TheSandDoctor Hopefully, the issues have been fixed now. I hope you enjoyed reading the article! Adityavagarwal (talk) 17:04, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

@Adityavagarwal: Looks good. GA has passed. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 17:16, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

TheSandDoctor Thank you very much for your review! Adityavagarwal (talk) 17:19, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

You're welcome. --TheSandDoctor (talk) 17:21, 3 October 2017 (UTC)