Talk:Alma-class ironclad/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Skinny87 (talk) 08:57, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
- 'Three others patrolled the North Sea and the Atlantic while the last ship was enroute to Japan when the war began and blockaded two small Prussian ships in a Japanese harbor' - Comma needed after Atlantic
- Agreed.
- 'while another helped to intimidate the Vietnamese Government into accepting a French protectorate' - This is a little awkward and I would suggest the phrase 'intimidate the Vietnamese Government into accepting status as a French protectorate'
- Yes, much better phrasing.
- 'Montcalm, Atalante, and Reine Blanche cruised the North Sea and the former later watched a Prussian corvette in Portuguese waters' - Does 'the former' mean both vessels, or just one of them? Did they do anything to the corvette? You also need a comma after 'North Sea'.
- Clarified. No, the corvette remained in Portuguese territorial water for the duration. Disagree about the comma.
- 'Three others patrolled the North Sea and the Atlantic while the last ship was enroute to Japan when the war began and blockaded two small Prussian ships in a Japanese harbor' - Comma needed after Atlantic
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- 'This design was changed to substitute four barbettes for the upper battery,' - What led to the design being changed?
- Unspecified in my sources, but my guess would be weight problems.
- Some details on the range and firepower of the vessel's weapons would be appreciated, especially if a reader were to try and compare this with another contemporary vessel.
- Couldn't find anything of significance the first time I looked. I'll try a couple of other sources.
- 'This design was changed to substitute four barbettes for the upper battery,' - What led to the design being changed?
- a (references):
- Data for the 194 mm Mle 1870 gun has been located.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:07, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
- 'On 3 July 1877[6] Thétis rammed Reine Blanche who had to be run ashore to prevent her from sinking.' - Was this an accident, or somehow intentional? Clarification would be nice.
- No further details, although I'd think that it was an accident. They are in the same navy, after all.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
A brief but seemingly comprehensive little article. A few changes and some armament details, and it'll be good to go. Skinny87 (talk) 09:06, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:22, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
- Alright, let me know when you've searched, results or no, and I'll pass the article. Skinny87 (talk) 20:16, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
- Looks good, so I'll be passing now. Skinny87 (talk) 13:33, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
- Alright, let me know when you've searched, results or no, and I'll pass the article. Skinny87 (talk) 20:16, 5 October 2010 (UTC)