Talk:All the Lovers/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 00:34, 17 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Three dead links

Done, replaced three links, two to Kylie's site since it just got a reboot and one to SNEP since it too got a reboot. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 12:50, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You shouldn't have citations in the lead

When quotes are included a supporting ref is needed. Here are a few FA/GA articles that source in lead. Kylie Minogue Rich Girl (Gwen Stefani song) Heat (perfume) Saga (comic book) --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 12:50, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In Australia, the song under performed → This sounds a bit bias? Top 20 isn't under performing when you look at the bigger picture.

Actually it has underperformed in comparison to Kylie's past lead singles. I have added some words to convey this. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 12:50, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"All the Lovers" was certified gold in Australia and Italy, and silver in the United Kingdom. → Wouldn't you put silver then gold?
The lead is quote long, it shouldn't have four paragraphs.
Critical reception section, especially the first paragraph, is really big. It's a WP:QUOTEFARM
Commercial performance section is a bit all over the place. One tiny paragraph, followed by a huge one, then two more tiny paragraphs. It doesn't look very proportionate or clear. It needs refining. Three paragraphs of the same length would be best here.

I have made some changes, sorting the paragraphs in this order - 1) Minogue's two main audiences- Australia and the UK. 2) Europe 3) North America

Same for Development and release, the paragraphing looks unbalanced. I always try to make sure paragraphs in the same section are of the same length.
Synopsis and analysis, the quote at the end is already a block quote, so quotation marks aren't needed.
Reception section, it's so small there's really no point having a single line paragraph. Just make it all one para.
Ref 7: Official Charts Company, not Official Charts

There doesn't look like many points here, but some of them are quite big ones, as some section need some work done on them. On hold. — ₳aron 11

09, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

Addressed all. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 12:50, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. Passing :) — ₳aron 16:09, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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