Talk:All the Good Girls Go to Hell/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will begin this review today, though it may continue after the day --K. Peake 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Separate the recording years using a semi-colon since it is not confirmed that recording was not continous
Wikilink all lowercase per MOS:LINK2SECT
"The song was released for" → "It was released for"
Remove download and streaming since they are not backed up
" from When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?" → "from the album."
""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" is a pop track. It sees" → "A pop track, "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" sees"
"climate change and takes the viewpoint" → "climate change and take the viewpoint" with the wikilink
Why is only the devil mentioned when she takes on God's perspective too?
"the top five in five countries," → "the top five of five countries,"
""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" has received" → "The song has received"
"including a platinum award by" → "including being certified platinum in the United States by"
"and uploaded onto" → "and uploaded to"
"walk through a deserted road," → "walk down a deserted road,"
"praising the visuals message" → "praising the visual's message"
"promoted the song by performing it live at venues" → "promoted "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" by performing it live at festivals"
You should mention what year(s) she performed at those festivals
"Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, Glastonbury Festival and during" → "the Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, and Glastonbury Festival as well as during"

Background and release

"with Vulture Eilish's brother, Finneas O'Connell says" → "with Vulture, Eilish's brother Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas, said"
"God and the Devil, and" → "God, and the Devil, as well as"
"do all of this?'"." → "do all of this?'""
"in an interview on" → "in an interview with"
"the perspective of the devil and god," → "the perspective of the Devil or God,"
"He continues, saying it is" → "He continued, saying them looking down is"
"that "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" chorus" → "that the chorus to "All the Good Girls Go to Hell"" with the target
"Eilish shared in an" → "Eilish shared an"
Target Instagram story to Instagram Stories per MOS:LINK2SECT
"March 25, 2020, a playlist" → "March 25, 2020 that featured a playlist"
"kinda "inspired" → "kind of "inspired"
"with the latter handeling" → "with the latter handling"
"mastered by John Greenham" → "The song was mastered by John Greenham"
Target Robert Kinelski to Cocaine 80s
"The song was first released on" → ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was released on"
Remove wikilink on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?
"It was later released as the albums sixth single" → "The song was later released as the album's sixth single" with the target
"A flexi disc and cassette of the song was" → "A flexi disc and cassette for the song were"
"The release came with" → "The releases came with"
"to US customers via email." → "to customers in the United States through email."

Composition and lyrics

Target music critics to Music journalism
"noted the songs" → "noted the song's"
Wikilink G-funk
Wikilink Robert Christgau
"mentions the song has" → "mentioned the song features"
Target synths to Synthesizer
"while Jason Lipshutz of" → "and Jason Lipshutz from"
"commented about Eilish’s" → "said Eilish's"
"of the propulsive."" → "of the propulsive"." for consistency
"Lyrically, Eilish forsakes" → "Lyrically, the song sees Eilish forsake"
"mocks and walks away heaven," → "mocks and walks away from heaven,"
Target Catholicism to Catholic Church
"Eilish explains her degeneracies" → "with Eilish explaining that her degeneracies"
"climate change. 'Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?'"." → "climate change", noting that she quips: "Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?""

Critical reception

"has received mainly positive reviews from music critics." → "has been met with mainly positive reviews from music critics."
"Jon Pareles of" "Jon Pareles from"
"magazine, labeled the track" → "magazine labeled the track"
"Christopher Thiessen of" → "Christopher Thiessen from"
"one of the albums essential tracks" → "one of the essential tracks on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?"
"Roisin O'Connor in his review for The Independent had negative thoughts for the albums first four track," → "Roisin O'Connor, in his review for The Independent, had negative thoughts for the album's first four tracks,"
"kind of momentum."" → "kind of momentum"."
"descroibed the songs title as" → "described the song's title as"
"John Murphy, stated that" → "John Murphy stated that"
Should 'Xanny' be surrounded by apostrophes like 'All The Good Girls Go To' is?

Kyle Peake, I think it should because it is a song. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:45, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I meant to put "Shouldn't" not "Should" because it is not properly surrounded by them --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"like 'All The Good Girls Go To'."" → "like 'All The Good Girls Go To Hell'"."
"across the beat."" → "across the beat"."
"Sean Ward, writing for" → "Sean Ward, for"
"compared the song" → "compared the song to the Spice Girls'" with the wikilink
Add release year of the song in brackets
"and interpreted the song" → "and interpreted it"
"and "flips so" → "and that she "flips so"
"the track's overall narrative."" → "the track's overall narrative"."
"describing it has an" → "describing it as an"
"damn appealing."" → "damn appealing"."
"Jules LeFevre, writing for" → "Jules LeFevre, for"
"but comments that the song is" → "while commenting that the song is"
"and melody" and you’re left" → "and melody", leaving you"
"it never happens."" → "it never happens"."

Commercial performance

"and number 15 on the" → "and number 15 on the US"
"which denotes track-equivalent sales of 1,000,00 units based on sales and streams." → "denoting track-equivalent sales of 1,000,000 units in the US based on sales and streams."
Move Canada sentence to starting the second para
"at number 19 and was certified" → "at number 19, and it was certified"
"by Music Canada MC for shipments of over 80,000 copies in the country." → "by Music Canada (MC) for shipments of over 80,000 copies in Canada."
"was later was certified silver" → "was later certified silver"
"for selling over 200,000 units." → "for selling over 200,000 units in the United Kingdom."
"within the top 5" → "within the top five"
"peaking at the top of the chart." → "peaking at number one in the country."
"was ultimately certified gold in New Zealand by the" → "was ultimately certified gold by"
"15,000 copies in the country." → "15,000 copies in New Zealand."

Music video

Background

Wikilink music video
"with an image that said "haven’t" → "of an image that said "haven’t"
Mention the dates of both teasers

Not done, they were both teased during the same week.

Can you mention the date of the first one then? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"The music video was directed by" → "It was directed by"
Target Los Angeles, California to Los Angeles
"the videos stylist talked about filming the video" → "the video's stylist talked about the filming"
"She revealed Eilish" → "She revealed that Eilish"
"agonizingly long takes."" → "agonizingly long takes"."
"She also added that" → "The stylist further added that"
Remove wikilink on global warming
"on the video description" → "in the video's description"
Target UN Climate Summit to Post–Kyoto Protocol negotiations on greenhouse gas emissions
"also asking to support" → "also asking them to support"
"which measured six inches" → "that measured six inches"
"explained it was in" → "explained the figure was in"
"a dioramic display."" → "a dioramic display"."

Credits and personnel

Move to being the last sub-section here
Promonews should be italicised
The two sub-sections under this one should be sub-headings instead

Not done

Why did you not move it and keep the sub-sections? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

K. Peake, I did move it. The sub-sections are better than sub headings. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 00:56, 25 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Production companies should be above personnel

Synopsis

Img looks good
"left off.[55] It opens with a shot of Eilish's back being stabbed by syringes" → "left off, opening with a shot of syringes being used to stab Eilish's back" and move [55] to the end of the sentence before [56]
"she falls down from" → "Eilish falls down from"
"her white wings and eyes start filling" → "with her white wings and eyes starting to fill"
"She tries to" → "Eilish tries to"
"but has a hard time." → "but struggles to do so."
"Eilish barely manages" → "She barely manages"
"her entire body and white wings are" → "with her entire body and white wings being"
"continues walk down" → "continues to walk down"
"starts to catch on fire." → "begins to catch fire."
"through the road and" → "down the road and"
"turns around, her wings" → "turns around; her wings"

Critical reception

Retitle to Reception since it mentions the awards
"saying it" → "said it"
"we've laid eyes."" → "we've laid eyes"."
Remove wikilink on MTV
"viewed thed video as" → "viewed the video as"
""dark" and" → ""dark", and"
"was "more than just a music video."" → "is "more than just a music video"."
"stated that the video was" → "wrote that the visual is"
"while praising it" → "while praising the music video"
"to act right."" → "to act right"."
"Katrina Nattress of iHeart Radio described" → "Katrina Nattress of iHeartRadio described"
"The music video for "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was" → "The music video was"
Wikilink 2020 MTV Video Music Awards
"for Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." → "for the awards of Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." with the targets

Live performances and other use

Retitle to Live performances and usage in media
""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was included on" → "The song was included on"
"Eilish and Finneas further performed" → "Eilish and Finneas performed"
"on November 24, 2019, making it her first ever" → "on November 24, making her first"
"switched to bass guitar, as" → "switched to playing bass guitar as" with the wikilink
"around the stage against" → "around the stage, against"
"ends, the teenager stares into the camera and sticks" → "ended, Eilish stared into the camera and stuck"
Target acoustic to Acoustic music
Wikilink Steve Jobs Theater per MOS:LINK2SECT
Target Apple Music Awards to Apple
"In April of the same year," → "In April of that year,"
"in the trailer of" → "in the trailer for"

Credits and personnel

Add a fullstop at the end of the credits adapted part

Kyle Peake, what do you mean by this? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:14, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Add a fullstop after the album's title, even though there is a question mark; this is not a grammatical mistake since that's the title of the album --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Target Rob Kinelski to Cocaine 80s

Charts

Weekly charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Year-end charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Remove Israel since that is a ranking from favourites, not chart performance

Certifications

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Format → Format(s)
Label → Label(s)
Target Interscope to Interscope Records
Target Cassette to Cassette tape

References

Copyvio score looks too high at 45.4%

Kyle Peake, its because of the use of "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" and When We All Fall Asleep

Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 8 and wikilink The Music Network
Wikilink NME on ref 12
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 41 and 43
WP:OVERLINK of Stereogum on ref 49
Cite Promonews as work/website instead for ref 54
WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 59
WP:OVERLINK of MTV on ref 61
WP:OVERLINK of iHeartRadio on ref 66
WP:OVERLINK of Variety on refs 69 and 74
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 75
Cite Tophit as the publisher for ref 93 with the wikilink

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold after reviewing over the course of today, faster than I expected but I'll give you time to fix the issues still! --K. Peake 16:56, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss I have responded where anything still needs fixing. --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss I did move the credits and personnel sub-section since you forgot about that, but everything else looks fine. ✓ Pass now, glad to do so as I love this song! --K. Peake 16:34, 25 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]