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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 06:29, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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Wanting to wipe out the only songs nominee from last month. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:29, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Target 7-inch to Phonograph record in the infobox
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"a song by American rock band Smash Mouth" → "a song by American rock band Smash Mouth from their second studio album, Astro Lounge (1999)"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"it was released on" → "the song was released on"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"as the second single from their second studio album, Astro Lounge (1999)" → "as the album's second single" with the appropriate target
- Done. Also corrected as this is the first single, not the second. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Oh I didn't know that, why is the album page listing as second single though? Also, change to lead single now with the wikilink. --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:38, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done. The album page is wrong. It considers a song that was released as a single from a soundtrack album months beforehand the "lead single", but it was never a single from the album and "All Star" is correctly identified by sources as the first single. Toa Nidhiki05 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The song was one of the last" → "It was one of the last tracks"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Astro Lounge after the band's" → "Astro Lounge, after the band's"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"requested more songs" → "requested for more songs"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In writing it, Camp drew musical influence from contemporary songs from" → "When writing the song, Camp drew musical influence from contemporary music by"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Third Eye Blind and sought out" → "Third Eye Blind, and sought out"
- done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"to the more ska-punk" → "to the more ska punk" with the appropriate wikilink
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"of the band's 1997 debut album" → "of Smash Mouth's 1997 debut album"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
""All Star" adopts a more" → "the song features a heavier" to avoid repetitive wording
- I’m not sure the wording “features a heavier radio-friendly style” makes the most sense there? I did add the first part though. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Maybe it doesn't; you should find a way to not repeat "more" in the same sentence either way though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:38, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"received positive reviews from critics" → "received generally positive reviews from music critics" with the target
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Also, note what was praised by critics, specifically, in this sentence
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"for the Grammy Award for Best Pop Performance by a Duo or Group with Vocals" → "for Best Pop Performance by a Duo or Group with Vocals"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"have regarded the song favorably" → "have regarded "All Star" favorably"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The chart positions are out of order; you should mention that it reached the top 10 of lead charts first, then mentioned topping secondary US charts. Also, change "All Star" to the song in this sentence.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"ranking in the top ten" → "ranking in the top 10 of the charts"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target to Billboard Hot 100 should be on Billboard Hot 100
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I will probably have further comments after you have fixed ordering
"the Billboard Hot 100 and topping" → "the Billboard Hot 100, while topping" to avoid repetitive wording
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Why no mention of the music video here?
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:39, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"ubiquitous in popular culture following multiple" → "ubiquitous in popular culture, following multiple"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"most notably in the 2001 DreamWorks Animation film Shrek," → "most notably in Shrek from 2001."
- I’ve made a different change here - added (2001) after Shrek to match it with how Astro Lounge is listed above. Does that work? Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and received renewed popularity in the 2010s" → "It received renewed popularity in the 2010s"
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"ranking as one of the most-streamed" → "while ranked as one of the most-streamed" with the target
- Changed this to “and ranked”. “While ranked” doesn’t seem to work grammatically? Toa Nidhiki05 13:19, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background and recording

Img needs alt text
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the release year in brackets from the main text
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the last song recorded for Astro Lounge (1999), Smash Mouth's second album" → "the last song recorded by Smash Mouth for Astro Lounge in 1999"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Like the rest of the album" → "Along with the rest of the album"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target engineered to Audio engineer
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"on the strength of its" → "from the strength of its"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"no other hits had been spawned from the record" → "the album did not spawn any other hits"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"some to label the band a" → "to some labeling the band a"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the band's producer, said the album" → "Smash Mouth's producer, said the album"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"returned by buyers as the rest of the album" → "returned by buyers, as the rest of it"
done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"very little like "Walkin' on the Sun"" → "very little like the single" since we know which single this refers to
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In creating Astro Lounge, the band" → "For the creation of Astro Lounge, the band"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the band's guitarist, was tasked with" → "Smash Mouth's guitarist, had the task of"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"for Astro Lounge due" → "for the former due"
I really don't like this proposed wording here. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I feel as if it becomes repetitive to write the title out too many times. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target pop to Pop music
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Smash Mouth presented it to Interscope, their record label" → "Smash Mouth presented it to their record label Interscope"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the label declined to release it" → "the label declined a release"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"they felt it didn't have a viable first or second single" → "they felt there was no viable first or second single" with the target
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"him to a copy of Billboard" → "him to a copy of Billboard magazine"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"which featured artists like" → "which included artists such as"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"which would become the first two singles from the album" → "which later became the first two singles from Astro Lounge"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In writing "All Star", Camp considered" → "For the writing of "All Star", Camp considered"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Many of the fans that had written" → "Many of the fans that had written to"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"with the band. Camp" → "with the band, and Camp"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"with the upbeat instrumentation" → "with the upbeat instrumentation of the song" with the wikilink
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The band had very little time" → "Smash Mouth did not have much time"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"to record instead of their regular drummer" → "for recording instead of their regular drummer"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target drum loops to Looping (music)
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Are you sure the last sentence of this section shouldn't be in the following section instead?
Not sure what you mean here? It references the recording process, which is why I included in here. Toa Nidhiki05 18:36, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It is about who performes the whistling, which is part of the composition but not included in that section as of current. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I suppose the whistling could be mentioned in composition, but who performs it isn't really relevant there. Toa Nidhiki05 21:40, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

"key of F♯ major with" → "key of F# major, with"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"described it musically as alternative rock[6] and power pop.[7]" → "described it as an alternative rock and power pop track, musically.[6][7]"
This shouldn't be done since it makes it appear like the two sources say both of them. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"According to an interview in 2017, songwriter Greg Camp was interested" → "During to an interview in 2017, Camp stated he was interested"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"with the stripped-down song: the social battle cry" → "with the stripped-down song; the social battle cry"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Add wikilink on music videos
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Merge the second para with the first
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"he described as a "tradition" for the band" → "he called a "tradition" for Smash Mouth"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"according to Camp, the band" → "according to him, the band"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:01, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception and accolades

"received a generally favorable reception from music critics" → "was met with generally favorable reviews from music critics" with the target
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Merge the following sentence with this one, since that should be done grammatically here; however, you can add more of what was praised in the lead instead
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"example of the band's musical progression" → "example of Smash Mouth's musical progression"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Todd Norden of the Calgary Herald" should be the start of a new sentence
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"praised it as being" → "praised the track for being"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"than the songs on Fush Yo Mang" → "than the tracks on the album,"
Not sure this works here as the context is their previous album, Fush Yo Mang, not Astro Lounge, where All Star is from. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You're right, keep as the album's title like it is but that comma is needed for grammar fixing. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:41, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
[10][11] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The Associated Press praised it" → "the staff of the Associated Press praised it"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"as an example of the band's" → "as an example of their"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"infectious"[13] and" → "infectious", and"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
[13][14] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"felt it had the potential to be a hit" → "felt that the song had potential to be a hit"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Sandra Sperounes" → "Sandra Sperounes from"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"as an example of the band's" → "for being an example of Smash Mouth's"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"specifically its" → "specifically noting its"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"calling it a" → "calling the song a"
done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink MTV to itself
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"At the 42nd Annual Grammy Awards," → "At the 42nd Annual Grammy Awards in 2000,"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"losing to Santana's" → "ultimately losing to Santana's"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"from the editorial staff of" → "from the editorial staff of both"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"ranked it as one of the best songs" → "ranked the former among the best songs"
Not sure this is the best wording here, since there's no latter. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Was thinking so, as a mention of "Maria Maria" is included, but context makes things obvious as to what "it" is in reference to. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"noted its lasting cultural impact" → "noted the song's lasting cultural impact"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Shrek to itself
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Target popular meme to Internet meme
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
[19][22] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and had become a" → "and became a"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"called it " the best reason" → "called the song "the best reason"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
What does "glowing review" mean?
Very positive. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"lauded the song as having" → "lauded the song for having"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Noisey to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Annalise Domenighini calling it" → "Annalise Domenighini calling the song"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink ska to itself
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 15:15, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Release and chart performance

Retitle to Release and commercial performance
Remove the img since it is of no relevance
"May 4, 1999[25][26] as the first single" → "May 4, 1999,[25][26] as the lead single"
"It was also the first single for" → "Also, it was the lead single from"
"soundtrack album for" → "soundtrack album for the superhero film"
Wikilink Mystery Men to itself and add (1999) in brackets
"It entered the Billboard Hot 100" → "The song entered the US Billboard Hot 100"
"on the chart week of May 22, 1999" → "on the week of May 22, 1999"
[29][30] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
"number four on August 14" → "number 4 on August 14 of that year" per MOS:NUM
"would peak at number one" → "peaked at number one"
"chart[31] as well as on the" → "chart, as well as on the US"
[31][32][33] should all solely at the end of the sentence
The Alternative Songs chart position should start the following sentence after those three peak positions
"peaked at number two on the Alternative Songs chart and number five on the Adult Alternative Songs chart, respectively" → "peaked at number two and five on the Alternative Songs and Adult Alternative Songs charts, respectively" with the target
"It has been certified triple platinum in the United States." → "It has since been certified triple platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) for selling 3,000,000 certified units in the United States." with the target, and add the appropriate ref at the end of the sentence
"also achieved success internationally" → "achieved further success internationally"
"Top Singles chart[36] and numbers four" → "Top Singles chart, and numbers four"
[36] should not be mid sentence when it is at the end anyway
"It charted in the top ten in Australia" → "It charted in the top 10 of Australia"
"in the top 20 in" → "and the top 20 in"
"and in the top ten on the year-end" → "and in the top 10 of the year-end US"
Mention these as being year-end charts for 1999 at the end of the sentence
"in the year-end charts" → "on the year-end charts"
"ranking at numbers 31 and 4" → "ranking at number 31 and 4"
"The song has been" → "The song has since been"
Target should be to Music recording certification and be solely on certified instead
"It has been certified triple platinum in the United States.[47]" remove, since it is repeated entirely from the first para of this section
Mention what position it charted at on the Rock Streaming Songs chart in 2017 with the appropriate ref, and wikilink to itself
"It ranked as one of the" → "The track ranked as one of the"
"of 2017 and 2018 and ranked" → "of 2017 and 2018, and ranked"
"year-end Rock Streaming Songs chart" → "year-end US Rock Streaming Songs chart"

I think I got everything except the 2017 RSS position, as I don't have a subscription to view the entire chart. I also added a few more missing chart refs. ResPM^{come to my window} 12:50, 20 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

If you can't fix this, then why not just remove the 2017 info and only keep the other info about the chart? --Kyle Peake (talk) 17:14, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I was assuming someone else would take care of it, but I'll tweak the sentence a bit. ResPM^{come to my window} 17:27, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

"the music video features cameos by" → "the accompanying music video features cameos by"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"from the superhero film Mystery Men (1999)," → "from Mystery Men,"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"prominently featured the song" → "prominently features "All Star""
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink on body doubles
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The video opens with the characters" → "The visual opens with the characters"
Why visual? Not familiar with that wording here. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
That term is often used an alternative for music video in these sections across Wikipedia articles. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:41, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"seeking recruits. The group rejects" → "seeking recruits, with the group rejecting"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"expressing interest in Harwell" → "expressing interest in Steve Harwell"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The remained of the video focuses on Harwell" → "The remainder of the video focuses on him"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"rescuing a dog from a burning building and flipping over a toppled school bus" appears not to be backed up by the ref
The music video link embedded in the site does. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In June 2019, the video was" → "In June 2019, the music video was"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink on subtitles full word instead
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"By that point it had received" → "By that point, it had received"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove "and it has over 286 million views..." since YouTube is continuously updated
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:05, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

"The band performed" → "Smash Mouth performed"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in July 1999 at" → "in July at"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in reference to plans to" → "referencing plans to"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"rain as the opening act of" → "rain, appearing as the opening act of"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"A June 14, 2015 performance of the song" → "On June 14, 2015, a performance of the song by Smash Mouth"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the crowd, threatening to beat up anyone who threw things onto the stage" → "the crowd, with him threatening to beat up anyone who threw things"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"sang the song in place of Harwell" → "sang the song in place of him"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"had passed out in the middle of the set" → "passed out in the middle of the set"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"but the band continued" → "but the band continued their set"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:09, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Cultural impact

Film and popular culture

"It featured in 1999's" → "The song was featured in 1999's"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"where the band performs it" → "in which the band performs the song"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"live concert over the" → "live concert, over the"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink on Shrek
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"where it plays over the" → "being played over the"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Merge the second para with the above one, since Shrek is first mentioned in the first
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"about being featured in what" → "about being involved with what"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"the band was impressed" → "the band members were impressed"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"for the movie's ending" → "for the ending"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"suggested they use" → "suggested for them to use"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"perfectly fit the tone" → "perfectly fits the tone"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"is commonly played at" → "has been commonly played at"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove target on sporting events
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"that the band played it" → "that Smash Mouth were led to playing it"
I don't think this is an improvement because I'm not sure what this means? Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The popularity among sports fans lead to them playing it at that event. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:42, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink on 1999 Home Run Derby
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Derby and has performed it" → "Derby, and have performed it"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"The musical only has one song, "All Star", adapted" → ""All Star" is the sole song of the musical, being adapted"
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:25, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Parodies and memes

Remove wikilink on internet meme
"being used in mashups" → "being used for mashups"
[4][66] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
"said that it" → "said that the song"
"as well as the opening" → "as well as its opening"
Target parody to Parody music
"on the platform;" → "on the platform."
"the video, themed" → "The video, themed"
"has over 1.5 million views" → "has received over 1.5 million views"
Remove target on mashup
"albums (Mouth Sounds" → "albums; Mouth Sounds"
This and the one below aren't a proper use of semicolons.
"and Mouth Moods) that" → "and Mouth Moods, which"
"alongside other popular songs" → "as well as other popular songs"
"Mouth Sounds in particular has" → "Mouth Sounds, in particular, has"
""All Star" received additional exposure" → "The track received additional exposure"
"The music video for "All Star" also" → "The accompanying music video also"
"a massive uptick in views on" → "a large increase in views on"
"and peaked at" → "and reached a peak of"
"Harwell said the band considers" → "Harwell said they consider"
"because they released" → "due to having released"
"the band has" → "Smash Mouth has"
"and considers the" → "and consider the"
"to feature in remixes or covers" → "to feature on remixes and covers"
"in any because "we feel" → "in any because "they feel"
This is a quote, I'm not going to change a quote to something he didn't say.
"who is no longer with" → "who has since left"
I don't think this is useful as it implies he left after the interview took place.

All of these are done except as noted above. Toa Nidhiki05 01:56, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Formats and track listings

Retitle to Track listings, since that makes it obvious this is for different formats

Done Toa Nidhiki05 00:45, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Personnel

Retitle to Credits and personnel
(Credits from the album liner notes)[2] → Credits from liner notes of Astro Lounge.[2]
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Make sure that you don't mess up Michael Urbano, especially
All of these should be fixed. Toa Nidhiki05 00:30, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Charts and certifications

Retitle to Charts
This has been done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:17, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Weekly charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Wikilink Rock Streaming Songs to itself
Remove target on Billboard in the 2019 chart table, since that is the second table
All of these appear to be done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:26, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Year-end charts

These different years should be split into separate tables
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
See MOS:TABLECAPTION, the caption will be different here though
I think this is done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The 1999 table should be made sortable
This has been done one. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove targets on ARIA, RPM and Billboard
Done, I think? Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
US Hot 100 (Billboard) → US Billboard Hot 100
Done, I think? Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilinks on Alternative Songs, Adult Top 40 and Mainstream Top 40
This has been done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Don't know why that Hot Soundtrack Singles chart is there, sure you shouldn't remove it?
This has been done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
For the 2017, 2018 and 2019 charts, remove the targets
This has been done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:25, 23 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All-time charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Make sure you put in brackets the span of what years that all time chart took into account

Took care of everything here. ResPM^{come to my window} 19:21, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I have since added more suggestions though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:03, 20 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Captions added in; an IP added the year span. ResPM^{come to my window} 12:18, 20 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Certifications

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
This has been fixed I think Toa Nidhiki05 00:16, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

Make sure that all of these are archived by using the tool
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Copyvio score looks good at 24.2%
Give all of the refs accessdates
This isn't possible with the links using the charts templates. Toa Nidhiki05 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Toa Nidhiki05 I understand you can't for things like CD releases, but many of the refs with URLs are missing accessdates and charts/certifications in tables can have them added. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:24, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 4
Done? Toa Nidhiki05 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite Musicnotes.com as publisher instead for ref 5 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Are you sure ref 8 is a reliable source since that's a blog? Also, add publisher.
It's reliable because it's an interview with Camp. His words are the reliable part. 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)
Cite Associated Press as publisher instead for ref 11 and remove Courier-Post altogether
Actually, I just realized it was wrong but in a different way. Cite news says you should list an agency and the newspaper for syndicated content, so I've corrected it to that. Toa Nidhiki05 02:34, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove target on Billboard for refs 19, 29, 39, 40, 41, 48, 49, 50, 51 and 94
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink on Rolling Stone for ref 21
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Noisey to itself on ref 24 and remove the publisher
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite The Ringer as publisher instead for ref 26 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove target on Spin for ref 27
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove target on RPM and delete the publisher for refs 43, 92 and 93
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Are you sure about ref 53 against WP:SELFPUB?
I don't see a self-published source at 53.
MOS:QWQ issues with ref 54
I think this is done? Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite WBUR-FM as publisher instead for ref 56
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite MTV as publisher instead for ref 57
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite Gawker as publisher instead for ref 58 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 59 is missing a title or publisher and are you sure it's not unreliable since is from a blog?
I fixed the formatting issue. It's not a blog, it's from a rock radio station. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink on Noisey for ref 60 and delete the publisher
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink on The A.V. Club for ref 61
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite WBUR-FM as publisher instead for ref 62 and remove the wikilink
Remove target on Polygon on ref 64
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite NPR as publisher instead for ref 66
Cite MTV as publisher instead for ref 67 and remove the wikilink
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 68
All QWQ issues should be fixed Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Cite ABC News Radio as publisher instead for ref 70 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove targets on Interscope for refs 73, 74, 75, 76 and 77
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove targets on CD for refs 74 and 75
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink to United States on ref 74
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Remove wikilink to Europe on ref 76
Per MOS:REPEATLINK, "there is no problem with repeating the same link in many citations within an article". Toa Nidhiki05 21:33, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Remove the music video since that is in the infobox
Done. Toa Nidhiki05 00:16, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments and verdict

On hold after reviewing this long article, will be fine once you fix the issues! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:02, 19 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll go through these as time permits. Toa Nidhiki05 00:15, 21 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Toa Nidhiki05 Have done some copy editing to help out and commented just now. --Kyle Peake (talk) 17:14, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll look at this later today, thanks for the patience. Lots of stuff to go through here. Toa Nidhiki05 17:46, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's great to hear --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:08, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try and finish the few sections left tomorrow. Toa Nidhiki05 01:46, 28 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Toa Nidhiki05 I will put any responses to queries directly below them. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:59, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great, I’ll respond to any of them and finish off the references (the last section left) today. Toa Nidhiki05 12:38, 29 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake I've addressed all issues and responded to the comments above Toa Nidhiki05 21:43, 30 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Toa Nidhiki05 ✓ Pass! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:38, 1 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]