Talk:All My Heroes Are Cornballs/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:25, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Going all in on these albums GANs currently, will take this on shortly!! --K. Peake 11:25, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Only 2018 should be listed as the recording date in the infobox since mastering/mixing was 2019 work
• Use bullet points instead for genres per Template:Infobox album, also why are they ordered differently from in the body?
• Remove Vegyn from producers because he only served as a co-producer
• "of his record Veteran (2018)," → "of his second studio album, Veteran (2018),"
• Remove the 2019 part next to 93 songs
• "He handled the production, mixing and mastering" → "JPEGMafia handled the production, mixing, and mastering" with the pipes
• "Helena Deland and" → "Helena Deland, and"
• "Vegyn and Young Emoji." → "Vegyn, and Young Emoji."
• "noise and industrial music." → "noise, and industrial music."
• "It has a" → "The album has a"
• Pipe sampling to Sampling (music)
• Wikilink falsetto
• "the album is personal," → "it is personal,"
• "political issues and JPEGMafia's" → "political issues, and JPEGMafia's"
• "on the rapper's YouTube," → "to the rapper's YouTube," with the wikilink
• "on October 14, 2019 and" → "on October 14, 2019, and"
• Shouldn't the critics be identified as music critics?
• "as well as praising its detailed" → "Others praised the detailed"
• "of them deemed it superior to" → "of them saw an improvement from"
• "first entry in the chart." → "first entry on the chart, as well as..." then adding the number 37 position reached in Lithuania, also the first entry part is not sourced in the body

Background and recording

• Remove wikilink on JPEGMafia
• Mention around the recording info that it finished in 2018 per Fact; mixing and mastering is separate
• Remove pipe on produced
• "mixed and mastered by himself in" → "mixed, and mastered by JPEGMafia in"
• "which was also the case for" → "as he had also done for" since otherwise, it sounds like he recorded this album at home too
• Remove the "in support of FM!" part, as this is irrelevant
• "He constantly uploaded the progress percentage to" → "JPEGMafia constantly updated the progress percentage on"

Music and lyrics

• "and screaming synths."" → "and screaming synths"." per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences and add the pipe
• Pipe to alternative hip hop should be on experimental hip hop, as this is the alternate name for the genre
• What is the point of [17] when it does not mention the above genre?
• [19][20] should be at the end of the sentence since only the word record follows that genre here
• [21] and [22] should only be after noise, as refs shouldn't be invoked twice in a sentence and that's the later comma
• "industrial[23] and experimental pop,[23] and" → "industrial, and experimental pop,[23] as well as"
• "R&B[7] and vaporwave.[7][24]" → "R&B, and vaporwave.[7][24]"
• "of BBC News opines that" → "of BBC News opined that" with the wikilink
• "and that the album could" → "and the album could"
• [25] should not be after the second comma since it is already after the third
• [26] should not be mid-sentence per above
• "are also present in his previous album Veteran." → "are also present in Veteran."
• "the album as melodic and less abrasive than Veteran," → "All My Heroes Are Cornballs as more melodic and less abrasive than its predecessor,"
• [30] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [15]
• "called it his" → "called All My Heroes Are Cornballs his"
• "introspective and his most" → "introspective, and his most"
• [31] should be solely at the end of the sentence
• Add release years of Smile and FanMail in brackets
• "Kanye West and" → "Kanye West, and"
• "the lyrics as" → "the lyrical style as"
• The humorous and aggressive parts are unsourced, also is the word ironic needed when the quote backs that up?
• "The album also expresses" → "All My Heroes Are Cornballs also provides"
• [20] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [24]
• Where is prejudice sourced?
• "groupthink critics and online" → "groupthink critics, and online"
• [20][27][34][32] should be put in numerical order
• [25][35] should be solely at the end of the sentence, ordered numerically with the rest
• "anime and video games." → "anime, and video games." with the wikilink
• Wikilink Spectrum Culture
• "summarizes them as" → "summarized the music as"
• "cynical and funny."" → "cynical and funny"."

Songs

Tracks 1–9

• Isn't the opener built around distorted vocals, not any samples?
• Pipe chorus to Refrain
• The sitcom title part is not sourced
• Pipe keyboard to Keyboard instrument
• "and a dusty" → "that transforms into a dusty"
• Use track instead of song after noise rap, but no source is used for this being the third song and pop-rap isn't backed up either
• "with "manipulated vocal" → "with "a manipulated vocal"
• "of guitar" which" → "of guitar", which"
• [32] and [30] should not be mid-sentence when they are at the end
• "as ridiculing "type beats" in" → "as ridiculing these beats in" since the quotation is useless
• "mellow guitar-backed[36]" → "mellow guitar-backed,[36]"
• "by his time" → "by JPEGMafia's time"
• Pipe synths to Synthesizer
• "where he also sings" → "and also features him singing"
• "of the album." → "of All My Heroes Are Cornballs."
• "as "really random" and was almost cut from the record." → "as "really random"; it almost did not make the final cut."
• "track[28] about JPEGMafia's" → "track that is about JPEGMafia's" moving [28] to the end of the sentence after [4]

Tracks 10–18

• "from JPEGMafia threatening" → "from JPEGMafia, in which he threatens"
• "particularly, on" → "particularly, in the line"
• "outro has a" → "outro includes a"
• "mellow piano and" → "mellow piano, and"
• No source says the mantra is delivered on the chorus
• "In the song, JPEGMafia delivers a" → "In the song, JPEGMafia delivers"
• "the Beatles and 98 Degrees." → "the Beatles, and 98 Degrees."
• The short length and pop genre do not appear to be sourced
• [34] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [20]
• The guest vocals are unsourced and pipe Buzzy Lee to Sasha Spielberg
• "synth tune[34] and a" → "synth tune, and a"
• "instrumental built with" → "instrumental built around"

Release and promotion

• Quote box looks good!
• "Prior to the album's release, JPEGMafia constantly labeled his new project" → "Prior to its release, JPEGMafia constantly labeled All My Heroes Are Cornballs"
• "promoted his album" → "promoted the album" but where are the video series and listening sessions sourced?
• Remove wikilink on Kenny Beats
• Remove pipe on Buzzy Lee unless the previous section's guest vocals are removed
• Remove wikilink on playlist and neither of these videos are sourced as being part of it
• [‡ 3] should be after the next comma instead because it is used for the title too
• Why is there no mention of when he announced the track list?
• "released the first album single," → "released the album's lead single" but you need a source confirming the date
• "released on September 13." → "released on September 13, 2019."
• "the second single," → "the second single" with the pipe, but this date is not sourced
• "for the album launch" → "for the album's launch"
• You should mention that the album was released on the planned date and write out commercial info here, as anything in the lead has got to be cited in the body
• "The album was supported by the JPEGMafia Type Tour through" → "All My Heroes Are Cornballs was supported by the JPEGMafia Type Tour, across"
• "and the United States, from" → "and the US from" per MOS:US
• Make sure you add a non-primary source since the article can't pass with any tags
• Wikilink music video
• Add a comma after Memory Cards
• None of the last two sentences' info, apart from shipping delays, is sourced
• Pipe deluxe edition to Special edition
• "episodes of his" → "episodes of JPEGMafia's"

Critical reception

• Remove the first sentence part about how critics described it and delete the redundant source too
• [16][19][20][26][36] is too many refs together; remove [20] since that is later used in prose for the same thing
• Remove the indicated part since that is not notable
• Remove pipe on Pitchfork
• "characterized JPEGMafia as" → "said JPEGMafia comes across as"
• "writer" and an" → "writer", and an"
• Shouldn't The Skinny review be further down since it is less positive than most?
• The "monumental display of musical talent" quote is not sourced
• "and uncompromising" and "a" → "and uncompromising", and "a"
• "said that All My Heroes Are Cornballs is one of the best produced albums of the year," → "saw All My Heroes Are Cornballs as one of the best produced albums of 2019,"
• Add release year of Far Side Virtual in brackets
• "resembles Ferraro's "dread" → "resemble Ferraro's "dread"
• "was echoed by Kieran Press-Reynolds's" → "was echoed in Kieran Press-Reynolds'"
• "which says that" → "where he said"
• "It also described" → "Press-Reynolds also described"
• Remove previous record intro to Veteran since that has been provided elsewhere

Accolades

• Refs should have a separate col and be centered, also center the rank numbers
• Remove unranked lists because they aren't seen as worthy of inclusion per discussion
• Is Gorilla vs. Bear a reliable source since it is an MP3 blog?
• Use rowspan 2 for PopMatters

Track listing

• "listed as "BabyBeamerBoy", and" → "listed as "BabyBeamerBoy" and"
• [b] is redundant here since it's a track listing, not prose
• [1] is useless at the bottom when it is already next to notes at the top

Personnel

• Pipe Buzzy Lee to Sasha Spielberg

Charts

• Good

Notes

• "constructed"[16] and lacking" → "constructed",[16] and lacking"

References

• Copyvio score looks fairly decent at 37.5%
• Nice job on the archiving!
• Remove Apple Music from the title of ref 2
• Ref 5's author should be formatted the same as the others
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 8, cite Genius as publisher and YouTube as via with the wikilink
• WP:OVERLINK of Pitchfork on refs 9 and 34
• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 12
• Cite Uproxx as publisher instead for ref 15
• Cite Sputnikmusic as publisher instead for ref 16
• WP:OVERLINK of Stereogum on refs 17, 45 and 74
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 25, 38 and 43
• Wikilink Spectrum Culture on ref 28
• Remove or replace refs 30 and 75 per Wikipedia:WikiProject Albums/Sources
• WP:OVERLINK of Pitchfork on refs 37 and 40 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
• WP:OVERLINK of Spin on ref 39 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
• WP:OVERLINK of Uproxx on ref 41 and cite as publisher instead
• WP:OVERLINK of The Fader on refs 42 and 44
• Replace ref 46 per earlier comments about single release dates
• Pipe Boiler Room to Boiler Room (music broadcaster) on ref 47
• WP:OVERLINK of Tiny Mix Tapes on ref 48 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
• Cite ref 49 as a primary source, plus Twitter should be in the via parameter instead with the wikilink
• Cite ref 50 as a primary source
• WP:OVERLINK of Clash on ref 59
• WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 64
• WP:OVERLINK of Paper on ref 65
• WP:OVERLINK of PopMatters on refs 67 and 68
• WP:OVERLINK of The Line of Best Fit on ref 69
• WP:OVERLINK of Under the Radar on ref 71
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 78

Primary sources

• Use via parameter instead for the YouTube sources
• WP:OVERLINK of BandCamp on source 6

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; hopefully you get to this soon since user contributions show you're not too active. --K. Peake 11:43, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

• ✗ Fail now because there's been no response after 10 days. --K. Peake 11:22, 14 November 2021 (UTC)