Talk:All Hope Is Gone World Tour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Binksternet (talk) 19:56, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Fantastic images, all good to go with proper licensing.
Some problems with simple grammar, simply fixed, such as "were noted upon as a particular highlight by Greg Cochrane of the BBC" and the indecision about which spelling to use on "canceled", US or British.
Big problems with references, with this tool saying roadrunnerrecords.com (a lot of links) and sonispherefestival.net are not allowing readers to check the sources. A URL at gazetteonline.com has been dead for a month.
This readability checker says the article is just about off the charts in terms of long sentences.
Major gaps in tour coverage, with no mention of people like lighting guy Philippe Vachon, main sound mix guy David "Shirt" Nicholls, monitor mix guy Ron Hurd, drum tech Sol Engelhardt. No mention of how the drums are miked, or how drum samples are triggered from an Akai Z4 sampler linked to Alesis DM5 pickups on the drums. No discussion of the design or setup of the drum riser. No mention of sound system details, with loudspeakers by Meyer Sound Laboratories. Nothing about the Audio-Technica AE5400 vocal microphones and the strain they bear. No mention of the band using in-ear monitors or how they like them. No mention of them smashing gear or how the crew deals with this. Nothing about the Digidesign Profile digital mixing console. No discussion of video elements, or where cameras were placed, such as on the drum riser. The pyro company on the last tour was Strictly FX, but I don't know who it was for All Hope Is Gone. Something should be in the article about the pyro design and provider.
Check out these links to fill in missing gaps in the article:

Overall result: Not passed. The article needs much more material on the sound system, lighting rig, staging elements, etc. The huge problem with roadrunnerrecords links must be fixed. Binksternet (talk) 22:27, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]