Talk:All About That Bass/GA2

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 18:56, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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on June 30, 2014, in select markets, it was → on June 30, 2014, it was (we don't need that extra bit in the lead)
taken from her debut extended play → included on her debut extended play
Comma before "respectively"
Link "lead single"
The song was released for streaming in the United Kingdom on August 14, 2014, but did not become available for digital download until September 28, 2014 → we don't need this in the lead; it suffices to know about the first release here
song that draws influences → song that draws influence
and played an important part in "All About That Bass"' rise to prominence as a viral hit → and played an important role in the rise to prominence of "All About That Bass" (this suffices)
Vogue recognized "All About That Bass" as part of "the era of the big booty."[2] → unnecessary in the lead
during her 2015 concert tours, the That Bass Tour → during her 2015 concert tours That Bass Tour

Infobox

No issues

Writing and production

Kadish then proposed the song title → Kadish initially proposed the song's title to be
along with doo-wop because Trainor felt → "since" is more formal than "because"
and pictured the song to contain a theme of girl power → and envisioned the song to feature a theme of girl power
a theme of girl power.[11] Trainor intended for the song's lyrics to be about self-acceptance of body type → a theme of girl power,[11] as well as of self-acceptance of body type
were happy with the song after it was finished → were pleased with the song after it was finished
but all of them were critical that the track did not have more mainstream appeal and the production team did not make use → but all of them were critical of the same reason, which was also attributed to the song's lack of
[15][12] → numerical order
and met Paul Pontius, the A&R for Epic Records chairman L.A. Reid, → this sentence does not make sense; did she meet with both or...?
Reid made a decision the final cut would be the same version → Reid decided the final cut would be the same version
played by Kadish; and piano, baritone → played by Kadish, as well as piano, baritone
Picture > should remain as the track's final version → no need for the "as"

Release

Link "single"
Link "lead single"
from her debut extended play → from her debut extended play Title
Link the EP and album
Comma before "respectively"
to increase download sales in United Kingdom (UK) → to increase download sales in the United Kingdom
So, if I understand correctly, they did not release it for streaming or
Streaming and digital release dates were held back on different dates for the song → But wasn't the song already released for digital download "worldwide" in June? By the way, you should replace "worldwide" with various countries since you can't really source that
and made available to download on → as well as to download on
a CD single for the song was released in Germany, with "Title" as its b-side → use "issued" here to alternate words
was later used on Adult Contemporary radio → no need for capital letters
Assistant program and music director of radio station WHUD, Tom Furci, stated he and program director Steve Petrone were reluctant to add the song on their radio playlist. However, Furci said they realized they could not refuse to play a national success. → This kind of lacks notability and should be removed

Composition and lyrical interpretation

Trainor's vocals span the tonal nodes of → simplify: Trainor's vocals span from
including: hip hop, country → remove the ":"
about thick and thin → this is quite unencyclopedic
line "All the right junk in all the right places" references OneRepublic's → no need for "references"
The song was compared to Sir Mix-A-Lot's → The song was further compared to Sir Mix-A-Lot's (for flow)
The song has also been described as a → "All About That Bass" has also been regarded as a (for alternation)

Critical reception

A variety of critics tipped it as 2014's strong candidate for → A variety of critics predicted "All About that Bass" as a strong candidate to be 2014's
was "one of the funnest songs" of 2014 → shouldn't this be "funniest"?
interesting song for young children listen to → interesting song for young children to listen to (wouldn't "inspiring" be a better choice?)
and "addictive" bass line → and an "addictive" bass line
but opined that "All About That Bass" was a novelty song → simplify: but saw it as a novelty song
commended the tempo and melody used in the lyric → we don't need all this extra info, it suffices to say "commended the lyric"
as a metaphor and quipped → ...and concluded (sounds better)
named "All About That Bass" as the sixth worst song → named "All About That Bass" the sixth-worst song

Recognition and controversy

and T-Pain.[57][58][8][59][60][11] → refs not in numerical order
Cosmopolitan ranked "All About That Bass" at number → use "it" here
in the category, Best Song with a Social Message, at → no commas
It was nominated in the category for Favorite Song → add "further" before "nominated" for a better flow
For the 57th Annual Grammy Awards → At...
body image as Trainor intended → body image as Trainor intended it to
offense to the song's lyrical content, manifested → no comma
In an interview in 2016, Trainor claimed she is a feminist → In an interview in 2016, Trainor claimed she was a feminist

Chart performance

Does the source back up the fact that it topped 19 charts? I don't see it...
replacing Taylor Swift's "Shake It Off" at the top of the chart → everything after the song's title is unnecessary
The peak position made Trainor → This achievement made Trainor
spent 25 consecutive weeks in the Billboard Hot 100's top 10 → "Billboard" should be in italics
becoming the first debut Hot 100 entry → becoming the first Hot 100 debut entry
"All About That Bass", together with Swift's "Shake It Off" and "Blank Space", occupied the Hot 100's top two for 14 consecutive weeks, marking the longest top two reign by any two acts in the chart's history. → But there are three songs you list. How can it be a "top two"? I'm confused...
"All About That Bass" ranked at number eight on Billboard's Hot 100 year-end chart for 2014 → "All About That Bass" was ranked at number eight on Billboard's Hot 100 year-end chart for 2014
with 4.38 million copies sold for the year → with 4.38 million copies sold within the year
seventh most successful → seventh most-successful
on August 3, 2014. The song reached a peak of number one on August 17, 2014, spent a total of four non-consecutive weeks atop the chart → on August 3, 2014 and reached number one two weeks later, spending a total of four non-consecutive weeks atop the chart
nonuple → lol, I didn't know that word existed haha, just a side note lol
success in the country. During its first six weeks → success in the country; during its first six weeks (better flow)
which sent the song to number 33 → "rocketed" would be a better word choice here
It made British chart history by becoming the first single → simplify: "It made history by..."
How many weeks did the song spend at number one in the UK?
as the ninth best-selling in the country → as the ninth best-selling single in the country

Music video

music video with his following on → music video with his followers on
Comma before "which"
and taught me how to perform and 'make sure → this is incorrect grammar, so: "and taught me how to perform and [told me to] 'make sure [I]
and a pastel 1950s-theme → as well as a pastel 1950s-theme
collared-sweater → collared sweater
who sport similar outfits to her → who sport similar outfits to hers
"the five girls" → I would rather say "women" since they're adult
offering an unhappy young man a cupcake → please remove "unhappy" since this is WP:OR; you can't interpret this on your own unless there is a citation
tosses the doll across the room → she tosses the doll across the room
second most streamed → second most-streamed
what should "offered a hard sell" mean?

Live performances

covered the song live in concert → covered the song live in one of her concerts
Following the performance at the ceremony, American singer Brad Paisley stepped into the audience and told Trainor that he felt she belonged in country music. → not notable at all in this context and should be thus removed alltogether
Release year for "Lips are Movin" in brackets
during her 2015 concert tours, the That Bass Tour → simplify: "during her 2015 That Bass Tour"

Cultural impact

called it "a cultural phenomenon".[146][7] → refs not in numerical order
Yahoo! published that the song → "reported" suits better here
Caroline Sullivan of The Guardian the song → comma before "the song"
In a different publication → "article" suits best here
Trainor highlighted → "elaborated" is the better choice here
to Billboard the song's success → comma before "the song's"
played into Vogue stating, "We're Officially → prompted Kris Ex of Vogue to state: "We're Officially
butt lift plastic surgery → buttock augmentation plastic surgery
entrepreneur and gym instructor, Kelly Brabants → no comma
link "Johnston Space Center"
The parodies later led to Time publishing → For better flow: "The big amount of parodies created eventually led..."
of the song, about failed New Year's resolutions, on → no commas

Certifications

I know this is done in more articles, but the note "Since May 2013, RIAA..." is really unnecessary since it's clarified in the bottom section of the certification table

Other things

29.6% is a very good percentage for copyviolation
No disambiguation links
No dead links; well done!
Apart from some exceptions noted above, the references—as far as I've checked them—do seem to back up the assertions made in this article

Outcome

On hold — This article shows some issues that need to be corrected but they're minor enough for this to be put on hold for 7 days. Best of luck with editing; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:35, 22 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cartoon network freak: Hi and thanks for taking time to review such a lengthy article! I believe I have addressed all the concerns. Regarding the sentence about the A&R, it makes sense since she only met Pontius, the part about him being Reid's A&R only serves to add context. And about the Swift songs, she replaced herself in the top 2 during the 14 weeks, while "All About That Bass" never fell out. So they managed to remain the only two artists in the top 2 and that is what the record is about.--NØ 19:19, 22 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Passing — Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:01, 22 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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