Talk:Alim Qasimov/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:34, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

Umm, I know you're blocked, but I'm going to carry on with this review anyway. See if anyone can take it. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:34, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• The major concern here is the lead section. It is disorganised and missing a lot of content - the lead has to act as a "mini article" and summarise the whole article. In its current standing it is not doing that and the latter two paragraphs should be merged, while a third one describing more of the article should be created.
• "He joined fellow Azerbaijani, Sabina Babayeva" - remove the comma
• "to sing back vocals for her entry" - sing back vocals??
• "a village 100 km north of the capital Baku" - convert to miles too using the template
• Some of the early life has a musk of original research. For example "Qasimov's father was an occasional singer with a good voice but he was a humble man; he never pursued a professional career in singing"
• Early life: "The form proved difficult for him at times: once, while performing in a local music contest at the age of fourteen, the audience —thinking he did not grasp the correct traditional style—laughed him off the stage" - needs copyediting, also what is "the form"?
• "He had realised that music" - per WP:ENGVAR, some words in this article uses American Spelling
• The last sentence in the Musical career section should be merged to something else, to increase flow (same with the "2000 to present" section)
• The personal life section is too short, I'd recommend deleting it, expanding it or merging it somehow
• Influence and legacy section is very small, surely he has a bigger legacy than this? Can it be expanded?

On hold

The major concern here is the lead section; it needs to summarise the whole article as it is missing a lot of content. Also, another paragraph could easily be added. I'd remove the quote and the citation from the lead too. Also, I suspect that some original research is in this article as some sentences sound encyclopaedic. I know that the nominator is blocked so I'm going to ask around and find out if anyone will tackle this review, so I'll leave this on hold for seven days. If nothing, I'll have to close it by the deadline. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 20:08, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

Close - not listed

It's been over seven days and nothing has been done. Feel free to renominate this. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 15:36, 11 December 2014 (UTC)