Talk:Alien: Isolation/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 03:05, 19 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Unlike previous video game adaptations of the Alien franchise, Alien: Isolation places a strong emphasizes on stealth and survival horror gameplay - Should be "emphasis"

Seems that User:DangerousJXD already fixed that. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The lead can talk more about the game's gameplay.

Could you please be a bit more specific of what needs to be added? I think the sentence "Alien: Isolation places a strong emphasis on stealth and survival horror gameplay, requiring the player to avoid and outsmart a single alien creature over the course of the game" already covers the gameplay section nicely. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Objectives range from activating computers to collecting certain items or reaching a specific area in the game. - I cannot find this information in source 3

This is an obvious, descriptive fact that can be verified by anyone who has played the game, therefore it is implicitly backed up by the primary source (the actual game). It is like the plot section or the personnel in the infobox, and it doesn't need an external source. You may also want to read this: Wikipedia:You don't need to cite that the sky is blue. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

forcing the player to wisely use the tracker and remove it as soon as it detects it - Wouldn't it be already too late when the alien knows where you are?

Clarified. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The motion tracker cannot detect the location of the alien when it is not moving and cannot determine whether the creature is up in the ducts or on the ground level - That does not limit to alien. Any non-moving hostile enemy would not be detected as well according to source 3.

Fixed --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Players or the player, choose one.

I guess you mean the word "players" in the following sentence: "players can increase their health...". In any case, I replaced it with the following: "the player can increase Amanda's health...". --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

In addition, the player can craft several items by collecting schematics and different kind of materials throughout the game. - I do not think "in addition" feels very formal

Replaced with "also". --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The alien is also afraid of fire, so using the flamethrower or a molotov cocktail will make it retreat into the station's ventilation system. - "also" does not sound really appropriate here.

Fixed by DangerousJXD --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Alien: Isolation features a separate game mode, called Survivor Mode, that focuses on tense, player-versus-alien scenarios. - "Tense" sounds subjective

Replaced "tense" with "short" --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

the player needs to complete certain objectives while avoiding the alien under a time limit. - any example of these certain objectives?

Replaced "certain" with "a set of". The objectives are like those in the campaign mode (activating computers, etc...), so I don't think we need to repeat that again. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

which is best known for their work on the Total War strategy video game series - real-time strategy, not just strategy

Fixed --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

shortly after publisher Sega acquired the rights to develop Alien games - I do not think it is "shortly after" because there is a two-year gap between them. When Sega acquired the rights to develop Alien games?

Removed "shortly" and added the fact that Sega acquired the rights in December 2006. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A six-person team developed a small multiplayer game to pitch the idea to Sega, a "hide and seek" prototype where the alien role had to be controlled by one of the players. - multiplayer is inaccurate. The alien is controlled by players, but the human survivor is not.

Clarified --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The game "went a bit viral within Sega" and the project was eventually approved. - can paraphrase "a bit viral within Sega"

Replaced with "captured the attention of Sega". I think that's the best way I can paraphrase it. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

game in a "weird" direction.[12][11] - A bit odd that source 12 goes in front of source 11

Fixed --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

with the release of a trailer on 7 January 2014 - What kind of trailer it is? Gameplay trailer, teaser trailer, or a cinematic trailer?

Added "teaser" trailer. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

As of January 2015, Alien: Isolation has sold over one million copies worldwide according to Sega.[38] As of May 2015, the game has sold over 2.1 million copies in Europe and the US - This information should be mentioned in the reception section instead of the release section

Moved to the reception section. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception for Alien: Isolation was divided but generally positive, with review scores ranging from IGN's 5.9 out of 10 to PC Gamer‍ 's 93 out of 100.[51][2] - I prefer the typical "positive review" instead of this. It receive divided opinions but positive reviews seem to have contradict each other

Although the game received "generally positive" reviews according to Metacritic, review scores were highly inconsistent. I think that is an important fact that should be noted in the first paragraph so that readers get a quick idea of the game's reception. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The first-paragraph of the reception section is not that well-written. It feels that it was poorly-arranged. It is very inconsistent with the remaining paragraphs.

It is not like the other paragraphs because it acts as an introduction. I can try to improve it if you want but you need to be more specific of what needs to be done. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The section seems to rely quite heavily on quotes. Try to paraphrase some of them.

I managed to paraphrase some of them. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Source is mostly good. PC Gamer feature "The Making of Alien Isolation" also have 3 pages too. You may want to specify which page you are using similar to other sources.

Unlike the GameFront articles, the PC Gamer feature is actually one URL with 3 sections, so that's why I only used one link. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Isolation is one of my favourite games back in 2014, and it is very good to see someone putting efforts into this article. There is some small problems that can be fixed easily, and some quotes that need to be paraphrased. Once these are fixed, the article should be good to go. AdrianGamer (talk) 05:46, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your detailed review and interest in the game, really appreciated. All the issues have been addressed except for some points, on which I left comments. Please let me know what you think. Thanks. --Niwi3 (talk) 11:59, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I am now happy with how the article looks now. Alien: Isolation promoted to

. Congratulations. I have one reply regarding WP:BLUE, it is an essay, not a policy. I preferred everything to be supported by sources. AdrianGamer (talk) 13:55, 22 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]