Talk:Alice Milliat/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Femina Sport, ... Federation Francaise Sportive Feminine" neither notable? No articles at fr.wiki?
"she helped form" Milliat helped...
Might be worth linking association football as a large number of our readers don't really understand that phrase.
"statue of Alice Milliat was" just Milliat.
"French Olympic Committee's" link?
Any reason that image isn't in the infobox, crammed instead underneath it?
Date format in infobox is different to date format in rest of article.
Says in infobox her occupation was writer but that term is not mentioned anywhere else at all.
"Here she .." there.
Perhaps "translator" should be in the infobox as occupation?
"she returned to France.[1][2][3] Whilst in England" bit muddled chronologically for me.
"Olympic Games and founding the IOC (International Olympics Committee) in" -> "Olympic Games and founding the International Olympics Committee (IOC) in"
"only in the sports of golf" do we need "the sports of"?
"Formation of the FSFI" you don't even abbreviate to FSFI in this section.
"asked the IAAF to include" what's that?
"They refused" two-word sentence, can we merge it with the request sentence, e.g. "but they refused"?
"Florence Carpentier" who is she?
"Further edition of the Women's Olympiad were held in 1923 and 1924.[1][10] The 1921 Women's Olympiad..." again, the chronology is a little out of whack for me.
"played the Dick, Kerr's Ladies in" played against.
"Olympics s" ?

Thanks for the constructive comments, The Rambling Man. Hopefully I've addressed everything mentioned above. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:33, 31 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]