Talk:Al Pacino/GA1
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Reviewer: Artoasis (talk) 14:56, 2 April 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- I like the prose of this article very much. The only quibble I had is with some of the word choices in the lede.
- — "He is most famed for playing mobsters"; The word "most" has a POV tone. May I suggest you remove it?
Done - — "His love of Shakespeare caused him to direct his first film with Looking for Richard"; The word "cause" often indicates to make something bad happen. Can you replace it with "led"? Done
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Unreliable source: TMZ Done replaced
- Unsourced sentences:
- — "In 1966, after many previous unsuccessful attempts, Pacino successfully auditioned at the Actors Studio." Done
- — "The film received mainly positive reviews (?) with Janet Maslin in The New York Times writing..." Done rewritten in line with a ref
- — "Pacino's film festival-screened Chinese Coffee earned good notices." Is there a review we can use as ref? Done
- — "In 1966, after many previous unsuccessful attempts, Pacino successfully auditioned at the Actors Studio."
- Unreliable source: TMZ
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I think the article is in very good shape for GA. But since I am very new to this review process, you will most likely need a second opinion. Best luck.
- All the issues raised during the review process have been properly addressed. I believe this article has reached the GA status. Congratulations. - Artoasis (talk) 17:20, 4 April 2011 (UTC)
- I think the article is in very good shape for GA. But since I am very new to this review process, you will most likely need a second opinion. Best luck.
- Pass/Fail:
If you're looking for a second opinion on this review, I've had a look through it. Everything seems to check out alright. I'd like to see a sentence or two under the "awards" header summing up the major award he's received, but that's the only thing and it's very minor. If I was reviewing this article, I'd have passed it, but if you'd like another opinion, that's alright. GRAPPLE X 23:51, 3 April 2011 (UTC)
- thanks for the input. I had never really thought about adding a line or two under the awards section but your definitely right it would be nice to see. I will get onto it. Cheers Monkeymanman (talk) 14:05, 4 April 2011 (UTC)
- I gave the article a more thorough look, and fixed some of the problems I spotted. Now there is only one notable unsourced sentence left. I'm ready to pass this article once it's fixed. Cheers. - Artoasis (talk) 16:23, 4 April 2011 (UTC)
- okay rewritten it plus a ref from variety. Monkeymanman (talk) 17:04, 4 April 2011 (UTC)
- I gave the article a more thorough look, and fixed some of the problems I spotted. Now there is only one notable unsourced sentence left. I'm ready to pass this article once it's fixed. Cheers. - Artoasis (talk) 16:23, 4 April 2011 (UTC)