Talk:Al-Mu'tadid/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 05:32, 4 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 05:32, 4 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links are good, but 3 DABs that need to be resolved
This confused me: following the death of Ibn Tulun, Abu'l-Abbas was sent against his son and heir, Khumarawayh The genealogy is complicated enough that I initially thought that Khumarawayh was another son of Al-Muwaffaq, so clarify that he's Tulun's son and heir.
"a keen horseman and took care to inspect both his troops and their mounts in person" (Hugh N. Kennedy) Is Kennedy the source of the quote? If so, provide a page number, although you can put it in the ordinary cite format if you like.
Typo: especially due tot he proximity
Put your titles in title case.
What country is Harlow in?
Images appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:10, 6 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions taken care of, except for the "keen horseman" quote, which is already covered by the reference at the end of the sentence. Anything else, particularly in terms of readability/comprehensibility? Constantine ✍ 16:58, 6 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]