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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 08:24, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


  • Language English → Not needed.
  • "Aja" is the title track of Steely Dan's 1977 album by that name. → "Aja" is a song by American rock band Steely Dan from their sixth album of the same name (1977).
  • Like the other six songs on the album, → Irrelevant
  • it is in the jazz rock genre, → it is a jazz rock song
  • though it is regarded as tending strongly towards the former. → So, a jazz song with rock influences?
  • Musically, it is a tonally sophisticated and structurally complex work that was praised on its release as the most ambitious song the duo had ever attempted. → This is only attributed to one source, as some parts of the source don't quite match this sentence. I think it is being interpreted a little bit.
  • Why is so complex? What makes it complex?
  • escape the stresses of his life "up on the hill." → Are these lyrics?
  • Supposedly it was inspired by a relative of someone Fagen knew, → This clause is structured wrong, but it also reads fans written.
  • "tranquility that can come of a quiet relationship with a beautiful woman."[3] → Quotes are generally discouraged from being used in the lead.
  • and unlike many of the other tracks on the album, → There's only six, according to the first paragraph, so this reads a bit odd.
  • Both combined for solos → I don't understand this.
  • Gadd continued his, the first drum solo in a Steely Dan song,[5] in the song's tag, all recorded in just two takes. → This is really jumbled up.
  • It has been a favorite of the band's fans,[8] → If this is in the main body, then it doesn't need a citation here.
  • You don't mention the producer in the lead.
  • The whole lead is a bit messy. It needs rewriting.
  • A lot of the first paragraph of the Background section is not relevant. This song is from their sixth album, so we don't need info from 6 years previous as to before they formed. That is needed on the first, and perhaps second, album only. But this is a song article, so it's not needed even more so.
  • You would add The Village Recorder to the parameter for Recorded in the info box.
 Done Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gary Katz produced, → Gary Katz produced the song,
Reworded. Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Words such as 'Ultimately', 'Eventually', 'Supposedly' read really fan-written and you shouldn't use them.
  • Drum solo section opens with a quote to no prior explanation of what its significance is or who is meant to have said it.
  • Avoid one line paragraphs like in Reception and Samples.
  • There's an awful lot of content in the Recording and Composition sections. They are very detailed and very big. These could easily be condensed and streamlined.
  • You say its a fan favourite in the Legacy section but I can't see anything that supports that.
  • WhoSampled is not a reliable source. I checked at RSN and it was confirmed as such.
  • There are am incredible amount of quotes in this article. Some need to be paraphrased into your own words for sure.
Outcome

I'm sorry but I'm failing this article. I can see you've put a lot of time into this article, but I don't think it meets Good Article criteria. If I felt that the issues should be done within seven days, I would have placed on hold. But I think that many sections need completely rearranging and rewriting. And for that, i suggest nominating the article for a Peer Review or asking for it to be thoroughly copyedited by a member of the GOCE.  — Calvin999 17:51, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]