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Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 21:18, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

Comments

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  • Lead should include something from the reception section.
Done Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "To match the original Top Gun theme..." - Has the military theme disappeared? Just asking because at Wonderland it is completely gone (other than a control tower and a fighter jet)
I can't say for certain either way. I am attributing the theming to the original ride and, I guess, leaving it open to interpretation whether it is still there or not. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • After exiting the corkscrew, the train begins a 270-degree climbing helix to the left, after which..." - Remove one of the "after"'s...sounds weird.
Done Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...it reaches the ride's brake run and the return to the station" - Take out the bolded "the" and say something like, "and returns to the station".
Done Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • No reviews?
None that I could find from reputable sources. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
@Themeparkgc: [1], [2]--Dom497 (talk) 20:01, 12 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Done Themeparkgc  Talk  23:07, 12 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It debuted at position 18 in 1999, before disappearing from the poll for the three years to follow. The ride returned to the poll hitting a low of 45 in 2012." - Afterburn didn't appear from 2000-02 and 2009-11. The way I read it, it says that the ride disappeared in 2000 and returned in 2012.
I've reworded it slightly. Is it less confusing now. Basically I want to summarise the table, not duplicate it in text entirely. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Maybe mention how the ride is getting a paint job this off-season?
Is this really important enough for inclusion? Even then a quick search only revealed discussion forums, which are not reliable sources. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Well they did mention it on their facebook page. Either way, your choice. I just thought I would mention that because its in SheiKra.--Dom497 (talk) 20:01, 12 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I missed that. Done Themeparkgc  Talk  23:07, 12 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On hold for 7 days.--Dom497 (talk) 21:26, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

@Dom497: Thanks for another review. Let me know if there is anything else. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:51, 11 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
@Dom497: Themeparkgc  Talk  23:07, 12 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Pass!--Dom497 (talk) 01:01, 14 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]