Talk:African Auxiliary Pioneer Corps/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:36, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
Criteria
[edit]1. Prose ✓ Pass
2. Verifiability ✓ Pass
3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass
4. Neutral ✓ Pass
5. Stable ✓ Pass
6. Illustrations ✓ Pass
7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass
Comments
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- "was a unit of the British army" - Should British Army be capitalized?
- "Allied war effort" - link Allied to Allies of World War II
- You link shillings, but not pence. Is there a specific reason for this?
- "Building railroads from Beirut to Haifa, tunneling, loading ammunition onto trains, guarding supplies and working as cooks." - Sentence fragment
- "5 APC servicemen were killed" - MOS:NUMERALS
- "2 MBEs, 7 Military Medals, 8 British Empire Medals" - MOS:NUMERALS
- Lead could use a little expansion.
- Lede expanded.--Catlemur (talk) 22:11, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
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- Is photography really the best way to describe the paintings of the AAPC activities? Looks like they'd be licensed public domain as a painting, too, but it seems like a description of a painting would be better than a description of a photograph.
- Added "A painting of" to the description of paintings within the article. Would that suffice?--Catlemur (talk) 21:54, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- @Catlemur: - Sorry, I wasn't very clear. I was referring to the licensing information on Commons. Hog Farm (talk) 02:49, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
- @Hog Farm: I removed all the paintings, perhaps I will sort the licensing some other day.--Catlemur (talk) 07:35, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
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Good work. Placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 21:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)