Talk:Adrift (Torchwood)/GA1

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 17:15, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lede: "When bereaved mother Nikki Bevan (Ruth Jones) starts a support group for missing people Gwen..." Comma needed after 'people'
Lede: I'd add Jack's last name in the intro, same with plot, too
Plot: "...that all these..." Change 'these' to 'the'
Plot: "The two women postulate the implications of this, that the rift can take people away and discard them elsewhere." I think there should be a colon instead of a comma here
Production: ""Adrift" was produced as part of its own production block, block seven." Similarly, should be a colon
Production: "Unlike the rest of the episodes in the series this episode..." Comma after 'series'
Reception: "Ian Berriman of SFX rated the episode four and a half stars out of five feeling it to show..." -> "Ian Berriman of SFX rated the episode four and a half stars out of five and felt that it showed..."
Reception: "He felt a sequence where Gwen's husband Rhys "tears a strip off Gwen, then reminds her what Torchwood is fighting for" to be the episode's highlight." -> "He felt that the sequence where Gwen's husband Rhys "tears a strip off Gwen, then reminds her what Torchwood is fighting for" was the episode's highlight."
Reception: "He gave the episode four stars feeling..." Comma after 'stars'
References: Link AOL TV and IGN

That's all. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 22:45, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Handled everything you raised. Thanks for the review! AOL TV refers to a different (now defunct) offshoot of the parent company and isn't anything to do with their TV reviews :-) Eshlare (talk) 23:18, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, didn't know that. Happy to pass now!--Gen. Quon (talk) 16:50, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]