Talk:Adrar Stadium/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:32, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Cltjames (talk · contribs) 16:34, 28 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:08, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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I decided to cut this review short after one level-2 section of copy. I believe that there is a very large volume of copy changes that need to be made, overly large for a review at this venue. I encourage you to request a copyedit at the Guild of Copy Editors before returning to GAN. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:32, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

This article contains a very high volume of copy errors, needless prepositional phrases, etc.

Lead

Adrar Stadium ... is a multi-use stadium in Agadir, Morocco, near the Atlas Mountains, and is used by the local football team: Hassania Agadir, and sometimes the Moroccan national team and also for FIFA and CAF international football matches as a neutral venue. This is a very long sentence. Try Adrar Stadium ... is a multi-use stadium in Agadir, Morocco, near the Atlas Mountains. It is used by the local football team Hassania Agadir and sometimes the Moroccan national team, in addition to use as a neutral venue for FIFA and CAF international football matches.
- Wikilink FIFA and CAF. Expand CAF acronym out.
Agadir's Adrar stadium is used mostly for club football matches in the Botola Pro League and has a capacity of 45,480 spectators. There have also been various international friendlies and qualification matches played in the stadium for the Moroccan national team but it has also been a neutral venue for some Confederation of African Football (CAF) teams to play friendlies and tournament qualification matches. And, it can also host music concerts. Yet, it is undergoing renovations to increase the capacity for its use in future international football tournaments hosted in Morocco for 2025 and 2030. A lot of issues—the bolded prepositional/interjection/conjunctions are the biggest and something that should be avoided. Try Adrar Stadium, with a capacity of 45,480, is used mostly for club football matches in the Botola Pro League and sees occasional use for the Moroccan national team; as a neutral venue for CAF friendlies and tournament qualifiers; and as a concert venue. Renovations are under way to increase its capacity ahead of international football tournaments to be hosted by Morocco in 2025 and 2030.

History

The stadium's first plan began in 2003, as it was to be a host venue for 2006 FIFA World Cup, which was awarded to Germany.
- This makes no sense because this tournament was bid out in 2000.
- Add "the" after "for"
Similarly, Then, the project was put on hold and resumed in 2007 for the 2010 FIFA World Cup, however, in 2010, South Africa was awarded the tournament as hosts, and plans for the stadium were paused. makes no sense.
Try The project was resumed in 2009 and completed on 11 October 2013. The inaugural match featured tenants Hassania Agadir—moving from the Stade Al Inbiaâte—in a friendly against the Algerian side JS Kabylie. Hassania's Saad Lemti scored the first goal in the stadium in the 76th minute, the lone goal of the match.
The final cost of the construction was 860 million MAD ($103 million in USD) in 2013, going up to 1.008 bn Moroccan Dirhams (MAD). How did it go up?
The architects for the project were the Italian firm, Gregotti Associati International with the collaboration of the Moroccan architect Sâd Benkiran. Remove the comma; that's not an appositive, nor should it be (if we just said "the Italian firm", the logical question is "who?").
On the site is a Conference Center, Exhibition Center, Restaurants, Snack Bar, and Shops. Why are these things Capitalized when they are not Proper Nouns?
The stadium completed in 2013 Redundant: can remove "completed in 2013" has a media tribune that holds 288 journalists and 12 different commentary boxes. The current stadium with a capacity of 45,000 is three-tier and has seating for a total of 5,000 VIP guests, including 3 VIP zones each capable of hosting 250 guests, and 12 lounges that can host 300 guests.}}
The Expansion plans section really needs to have citations earlier than the last sentence of the first paragraph.
- A link to Africa Cup of Nations is more than merited here.
- This paragraph is a slog. I would have written: A two-phase expansion project, as part of a national investment in sporting infrastructure, was announced in 2024. The first phase, to be completed for the 2025 Africa Cup of Nations to be held in Morocco, will expand capacity by 14,144. The second phase, to begin after the Africa Cup of Nations and conclude in 2028, will increase football capacity to approximately 70,000 in time for the 2030 FIFA World Cup, which Morocco will co-host.

Sourcing and spot checks

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