Talk:Admiral Ackbar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 09:28, 17 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 09:28, 17 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Shouldn't "Los Angeles Times Syndicate" be in italics? Just asking and do state with reason.
- The reason I didn't italicize was because this is a news syndication service, as opposed to a publication. The latter would certainly be italicized but I didn't think that a service necessarily would be. However, I see on the Los Angeles Times Syndicate page that it is italicized there, so I've gone ahead and italicized it here as well. — Hun ter Ka hn 15:39, 24 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
A wikilink for Daluuj would be good (If it is listed in the list of Star Wars planets).
- It actually is not included on the list of planets, and based on the criteria outlined at Talk:List of Star Wars planets and moons I'm not sure it meets the informal criteria to be included, hence why I did not wikilink it. — Hun ter Ka hn 15:39, 24 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"a moon-sized superweapon Tarkin is developing" — Shouldn't it be "a moon-sized superweapon Tarkin was developing at the time" since Ackbar had already done it prior to his film debut? Just asking and do state the reason.
- Good call. I've made this change. — Hun ter Ka hn 15:39, 24 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"an autocratic military dictatorship that formed in place of the original Empire" — Shouldn't it be "an autocratic military dictatorship that was formed from the remnants the original Empire" as the First Order is a derivative of the Galactic Empire?
- Yes, that wording is much better and more accurate. I've made that change. — Hun ter Ka hn 15:39, 24 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

More tomorrow. Looking good so far, Hunter Kahn.

Thanks! — Hun ter Ka hn 15:39, 24 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't find anything much more that needed to be done as far as the prose is concerned. All aspects are quite well analysed. Good job, Hunter Kahn. Now on to the source review.

Sources

Reference 43 redirects to a 404 page not found error. Also wikilink The Australian and find out the correct URL or at least the archived version of the presently used URL.
- Hmm, yes, it seems that link is dead, and Internet Archive didn't turn up a backup. In any event, it was basically just supporting information that was already cited by another source anyway, so I've removed it, along with one basically arbitrary fact from the original sentence. — Hunter Ka hn 16:41, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
In the Bibliography section, add the location of the publishing company of the books and also use the ISBN-13 style instead of ISBN-10. This link can prove useful for the ISBN part.
- Done. — Hunter Ka hn 16:41, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it from me. Resolve the remaining comments and the article is promoted. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 15:06, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review! — Hunter Ka hn 16:41, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
Pass or Fail:

Thank you for addressing the above comments, Hunter Kahn. Congratulations, the article has passed. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 11:24, 21 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]