Talk:Abu Mansur Wahsudan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:28, 9 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• One para instead of two with one of a single sentence: merge what's there.

Think I did it? --HistoryofIran (talk) 16:28, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

• "from 1025 to" but infobox has (?) there so that implies a level of uncertainty not indicated by the prose.

It is; "This likewise contradicts coin findings, with one struck in Wahsudan's name in 1016, which suggests that he became ruler between 1014–1016." Sorry if this is a bit confusing, but I'm grasping a straws with the limited information there is x). --HistoryofIran (talk) 16:33, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

• What's a "suzerainty"?

Changed to authority. --HistoryofIran (talk) 16:28, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

• Where is his "issue" (in the infobox) referenced?

In the bottom of the reign section. Also added the last son. --HistoryofIran (talk) 16:35, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

• "sixty panegyric qasidas" what are they? Could we add a footnote explaining these highly jargonised terms?
• "against the Ispahbadh of Mughan. The Ispahbadh was" bit repetitive.
• "1037/8"->"1037/38"
• "1040/1" likewise.
• "1041/2," similar.
• And "1232/3".
• "1058/9" last one I think.
• Abu Nasr Husayn II is shown in succession box as predecessor, but the infobox and text demonstrate that's uncertain.

Yeah the infobox is kinda limited in that regard. That's about the best way I could explain it. --HistoryofIran (talk) 16:31, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:27, 17 September 2021 (UTC)