Talk:A Very Trainor Christmas/GA1

GA Review

Passed.

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:44, 7 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I will get on with this starting from today! --K. Peake 07:44, 7 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

The ref is not needed in the infobox when that single is already sourced in the body
"released the album on" → "released it on"
"Trainor involved her family members in its creation, co-writing its songs with" → "Meghan Trainor involved her family members in the creation, co-writing songs with" to be less wordy and per MOS:SAMESURNAME

Not done I find the switch to full names mid-article very jarring. Removing the surname's repetition for Gary solves the problem.

"and her father, Gary Trainor. It includes" → "and her father, Gary. The album includes"
"The album was supported by" → "It was supported by"
Wikilink music videos
"towards her charisma" → "towards Trainor's charisma"

Background

Img looks good!
The term "forayed" is not appropriate for Wiki; use something more formal

Not done Cambridge defines foray as "a short visit, especially with a known purpose" so its usage here makes sense and I actually can't think of a better alternative.

"to complete the album:" → "to complete her Christmas album:" to be specific
Wikilink music videos
"to feel like "a pop Christmas"," → "to feel like "a POP Christmas"," per the source

Not done per MOS:ALLCAPS as pop is not an acronym or initialism.

"she officially announced" → "Trainor officially announced"

Composition

"Jenna & Marcus Toney" this is two people so shouldn't it have the word "and" unless they operate as a duo?

I checked Apple Music and they treat this as a band-type stage name

"Trainor stated that she" → "Meghan Trainor stated that she"

Not done per above.

[14] should be re-invoked at the end of the Earth, Wind & Fire sentence per that using direct quotes
"song "Christmas Coupon" and covers" → "song "Christmas Coupon", and covers"
"vocals on which she insists" → "vocals and insists"
"current-day pop" according to" → "current-day pop", according to"

Release and promotion

Remove "the song" introduction to "My Kind of Present" since you have already done this
Mention the single release was in 2020
"and a huge red bow." → "and a large red bow."
Pipe Christmas in Rockefeller Center to Rockefeller Center Christmas Tree
"from her husband, Daryl Sabara, and" → "from her husband Daryl Sabara and"

Not done Trainor only has one husband, so his name is not necessary to identify which husband is being talked about.

Disney Parks Christmas Day Parade should be italicised

Critical reception

Merge with the below section and retitle to Reception
"Critical commentary for the album was" → "Critical commentary for A Very Trainor Christmas was"
"the most ebullient but" → "the most ebullient, but"
"and believed it had the potential" → "and believed in the potential"

I have retained the "it", otherwise it sounds like the critic believes in his own potential to become a go-to Christmas soundtrack.

"He opined it" → "He opined the album"
"cheerful and charismatic and" → "cheerful and charismatic, and"
"with integrity and do not change" → "with integrity that does not change"
"and its momentum is" → "and the momentum is"

Commercial performance

Make this the third para of the above section
"It entered at" → "The album entered at"

Track listing

Good

Personnel

Good

Charts

Good

Release history

Label → Label(s)
The digital download releases are not actually sourced as various regions

References

Copyvio score looks great at 28.1%!!!
For refs 16 and 46, cite multiple regions if you need to back up a various release

Added as suggested!

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; proud I got this done within one day! --K. Peake 19:34, 7 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for another great (and swift!) review, Kyle Peake! Always a pleasure working with you. All done except for some of the points I disagreed with.--N Ø 21:20, 7 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

MaranoFan The only problem remaining is the commas for her husband, as this implies it is a separate person from the man listed. --K. Peake 19:20, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake I can see how it might appear so but it's actually not the case. From The New York Times, "The basic idea is that if the name (in the above example, “Jessie”) is the only thing in the world described by the identifier (“my oldest friend”), use a comma before the name (and after it as well, unless you’ve come to the end of the sentence). If not, don’t use any commas." In this case, "Trainor's husband" can only describe Sabara.--N Ø 19:23, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass now, I totally understand your explanation and thanks for it! --K. Peake 19:27, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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