Talk:A Newsboy Hero/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:51, 19 September 2015 (UTC)
Another Marie article. I should complete this tomorrow hopefully JAGUAR 22:51, 19 September 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- The leads needs to be expanded slightly to summarise the article
- I would recommend splitting plot and production into two sections
- "His alcoholism had caused much strife in his home and his wife" - informal
- Salvation Army could be linked in the lead
- " The Billboard ' review" - typo
Close - promoted
[edit]I had to do a little bit of cleaning up, but this should be good to go. The references are adequate and the article is quite comprehensive given the era. Well done 
JAGUAR 22:36, 19 September 2015 (UTC)