Talk:A Million Miles Away (Rihanna song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sufur222 (talk · contribs) 13:57, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Mostly, this looks excellent, especially the prose - very little needs doing here.

Lead

"violo" → surely viola?
"incorporates elements of dance-pop and urban" → urban what? Music, culture? Be more specific.
This seems picky, but I don't like the repetition of "release" in the sentences at the end of the lead. How about this: ""A Million Miles Away" charted at number 38 on the Spanish singles chart in November 2009, three and a half years after the release of A Girl like Me, although Rihanna had released two further albums in that time: Good Girl Gone Bad (2007) and Rated R (2009)."
Done all. AARON• ^TALK 14:04, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"Then, Roger took her to New York" → should say "Rogers", and would prefer simply "Rogers took her to New York", as "Then" is usually used several sentences of phrases into a section of prose - it feels unneeded here.
"received reviews from music critics" → what sort? Positive, mixed?
"she announced that she is going to release her second studio album" → it's not 2006 anymore.
"When asked about the album," → remove comma.
"Rihanna stated, "Vocally I've..." and "Rihanna explained, "It's called..." → remove both commas. In my opinion, the latter should read "Rihanna explained that "It's called..." as this reads more fluidly.
It's a quote, not my own words. AARON• ^TALK 14:07, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done all. AARON• ^TALK 14:07, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Recording and composition

Excellent. No issues, very well written.

Critical reception

Avoid repetition of "was critical of the song". Use other synonyms for criticism.
In the Popmatters review, why has the reviewer compared this song to "Final Goodbye"? Some description on the musical style of "Final Goodbye" would allow the reader to understand why he has made this comparison.
She says that they are "slow gooey numbers". AARON• ^TALK 14:14, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
What you've just written appears to be a quote from the Slant Magazine review (as Quentin doesn't appear to be a woman's name - just a joke). No words to that effect appear in the Popmatters review. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 16:18, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done all. AARON• ^TALK 14:14, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Format

No issues.

Credits and personnel

No issues.

Charts

No issues.

References

Decide on a consistent date format (see refs 16 and 21).
Ref 4: Allmusic → AllMusic. It should also not be in italics, as it is not a printed publication.
In ref 5, you list Nielsen Company as the publisher, whereas in refs 9 and 10 you choose Prometheus Global Media. You also format the titles in different ways in 9 and 10. Regardless as to who was the publisher at the time of the reference's publication, be consistent.
The author of ref 16 is Dan Charnas.
Done all. AARON• ^TALK 14:14, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Apart from these points, this is certainly GA standard, with a very broad, unbiased and well-written coverage - especially considering that is not one of Rihanna's better known songs. I will put the review on hold for a week to allow my points to be addressed - if you have any queries regarding what I've written, please contact me as I'll be glad to explain anything in further detail. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 13:57, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Everything mostly looks fine now - just two more points, as well as the one above: in the Background section, "entitled A Girl Like Me" → "entitled A Girl like Me, and in the Critical reception section, Popmatters → PopMatters. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 15:55, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done. AARON• ^TALK 17:07, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All appears well now, so passing. Very good, as always. Since I'm feeling rather charitable today, I'll review "Betcha Gon' Know (The Prologue)" for you soon as well (when I can be bothered and have time, probably in the next few days - lots of schoolwork to do). Again, well done. I Am Rufus • Conversation is a beautiful thing. 17:18, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks :) AARON• ^TALK 17:42, 4 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]