Talk:A Big Mooncake for Little Star

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Review: October 1, 2019. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:A Big Mooncake for Little Star/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 21:47, 8 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It may take me a few days to get started. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:47, 8 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

A cover illustration?

Done

"she'd" → 'she had'.

Done

"Little Star was thus inspired by Lin's daughter" This is not clear to me. Even if I strain. I think that is due to the preceding two sentences. This one needs moving to immediately after "... would be no more until next year". But then it seems to repeat "The story was then inspired after her daughter... " I think that you need to review this paragraph.

Reworded. I was trying to express too much in too few words. Barkeep49 (talk)

"This reinforces the book's space theme with Little Star's eating of the mooncakes represents the phases of the moon" Mixed tenses. Either "with" → 'while' or "represents" → 'representing'.

Done

"She also wanted to capture "was the same mother-daughter bond" " Delete "was".

{{done}

"The book was also compared to Maurice Sendak's In the Night Kitchen" Why use "also"?

I had mentioned the Blueberry for Sal comparison and so this is a second one. I have added a second source to make clear that this was noted by several reviewers. Barkeep49 (talk)

"Writing and illustrations" is a long section. Could you insert a paragraph break?

Done - it's still a long paragraph and a short one because I didn't want to break-up the discussion of black amongst paragraphs. Barkeep49 (talk)

" how Lin's "intriguing characters who come alive through facial expressions" " Delete "how".

Done

"Caldecott Honor"; "Caldecott Medal and Honor"; "Caldecott honor".

Made consistent. Barkeep49 (talk)

"Lin had tried to tune out the chatter around A Big Mooncake for Little Star being a possible Caldecott book." This does not seem encyclopedic language; it seems trivial; and I can't be sure what it means. (The last possibly because I am not American.)

People had suggested she might win a Caldecott which she tried to ignore. I think it adds color. Barkeep49 (talk)

Ho hum. Go on then.

"9:30 eastern" "eastern" will not mean much to non-Americans. Either explain, possibly via a footnote, or delete.

Changed to mid-morning. Barkeep49 (talk)

"a meaningful recognition for Lin" Er, would there be other illustrators for whom it would be non-meaningful?

Fair point. Tried a different paraphrase. Barkeep49 (talk)

"who had gone to Rhode Island School of Design for the subject" Guessing that she studied illustration there, would it not be clearer to simply state this?

Hey I did that even before seeing this comment. Barkeep49 (talk)

"Chris Van Allsburg" I realise that you have wikilinked this, but it may be helpful to briefly introduce him inline.

Gave him the intro "multiple Caldecott winner". Barkeep49 (talk)

Gog the Mild (talk) 21:00, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Could you standardise your use of hyphens in ISBNs.

Done

Is there a reason why the title in cite 4 is not in inverted commas?

Commas? Do you mean quotes? Barkeep49 (talk)

Yes. Sorry, forgot that that one doesn't cross the Atlantic well.

Gog the Mild (talk) 14:24, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Barkeep49: There is no rush, take your time. Wikipedia isn't going anywhere. I haven't even put it on hold yet. I am aware that you currently have other things on your plate. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:45, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

An afterthought: "The illustrations feature heavy use of blacks" I don't think that one can have shades of black; maybe delete the "s"? Gog the Mild (talk) 17:00, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Gog the Mild, did this and also responded to other pieces above. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 17:52, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looking good. A couple of minor thoughts on a last read through:

"studied at the Rhode Island School of Design for the subject of illustration" is perhaps a little clunky. Maybe 'studied illustration at the Rhode Island School of Design ... "?

Done

"traditional tales like about the Moon rabbit" Optional: 'traditional tales such as those about the Moon rabbit'?

Done

Gog the Mild (talk) 19:00, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Gog the Mild: Did both those changes. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 14:40, 1 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Another solid little article. Happy to promote. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:02, 1 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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