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hi everyone, i have just added to the plot that Daisy's 1st ball is red, is it relevant? not sure, are there any sources discussing any implications of the difference in the colors of the balls (1st a red ball, than a blue ball)? dont know, is this a great little book that deserves GA status? definitely yes! Coolabahapple (talk) 03:24, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coolabahapple I don't think any sources noted the differences in ball color but agree that it's a worthy detail to include in the plot. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 03:35, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
thanks Barkeep49, i didn't think there would be, although its the sort of issue that could be covered by the (mythical?:)) ANU School of Inconsequential Studies. Coolabahapple (talk) 04:57, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:A Ball for Daisy/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 08:44, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have copy edited. Could you check and flag up any issues? Thanks.

  • Could you add alt text for the image?
 Done
  • "Plot" is unsourced.
Plot sections which don't include quotes are generally unsourced. Plot sections in general operate in a weird space. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
I wasn't aware of that convention. I would have expected plots to be sourced to the work in question, but ok.
  • Reference 11 has a stray upright.
 Done
  • "after seeing how upset his son lost a ball thanks to a dog" This phrase doesn't really make sense to me.
It sure didn't. Fixed. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
  • "Raschka had never dreamed of winning the Caldecott was on his way to his studio to work when the committee called to tell him of his win." This seems a little confused. Possibly the sentence is trying to say too much and could be broken into two?
It could byut I think it works with a conjunction? Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
How about 'Raschka had never dreamed that he might win the Caldecott, and was on his way to his studio when the committee called to tell him of his win.' or something similar?
I had already done the and but also added the comma. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 12:05, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Apologies, I should have checked.

Gog the Mild (talk) 08:44, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Gog the Mild: Thanks for your copyedit. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 11:55, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Another fine little article. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:13, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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