Talk:A.A.R.M./GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 16:51, 28 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In the lead, it might be good to add that this was the penultimate episode to air.
"Later, he decides to get the documentary crew's help; the crew makes a DVD of many of the highlights of Jim and Pam's relationship throughout the series." -- this could use some rewording, since it sounds like Jim is breaking the fourth wall. It might be good to add something that says he's getting footage the documentary crew obtained over several years, as opposed to "throughout the series." It's difficult to explain, I know.
"She reads it, and the two happily embrace." -- She later says that she won't tell what's in the note, right?
"Dejected, he journeys to Poor Richard's Pub, where he meets the rest of his former office workers." -- Might also want to add he was fired in the last episode, and then rehired in the subsequent episode.
"The child that filmed the scene in which Phillip picked the beet ..." This needs some setting up, and I think you ought to move the description of the scene up from "Cultural references."
Two duplicate links. However, I spotted no external link problems and no disambiguation links. Images appear to be properly licensed and I see no issues with article stability or neutrality.

Placing the article on hold pending a few fixes. —Ed!^(talk) 17:13, 28 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think I got everything. How does it look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:40, 28 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]