Talk:70 Pine Street/Archive 1
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Building Name
This article should be changed to 70 Pine Street from American International Building. AIG sold the building and they removed the name from the building. http://skyscrapercenter.com/new-york-city/70-pine-street/ Aausterm (talk) 20:15, 3 May 2012 (UTC)
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 12:47, 5 May 2020 (UTC)
- ... that 70 Pine Street (pictured) was the third-tallest building in the world upon its completion, beaten only by two other buildings in Manhattan? Source: NY Herald Tribune
- ALT1:... that 70 Pine Street (pictured) used double-deck elevators due to its narrow plot? Source: NY Times 1998
- ALT2:... that 70 Pine Street's (pictured) upper stories were supposed to contain a private residence, but were instead used as an observation deck? Source: NYCL p. 8
- ALT3:... that a sky bridge enabled 70 Pine Street (pictured) to claim a prestigious Wall Street address? Source: NYCL p. 8
5x expanded by Epicgenius (talk). Self-nominated at 00:55, 4 April 2020 (UTC).
- I'll be reviewing this in the next couple of days. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 05:38, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
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ALT1 accepted AGF. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 01:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
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Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use 
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Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
Lead
sun-inspired motifs
Consider "solar motifs".
Done
and enclosed private terrace
An enclosed private terrace.- Done
Site
Referring to other examples of your work I've reviewing, I think "Site" could be combined with "Design" for a complete description of said site before launching into the walkthrough.- Done
Design
The first three paragraphs of this section all start with70 Pine Street
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Fixed
"Form" should also be combined with "Design". They both cover overarching architectural details and context and use the same sources. They both even discuss the spire on top of the building.- Done The form is intended more to describe the shape of the building, but this works too. epicgenius (talk) 00:27, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
The building contains numerous setbacks on its exterior.
How is something external contained?
Facade
The facade consists of Indiana Limestone on the lower stories, [...]
This could be worded better. Maybe:The facade of the lower stories is covered with Indiana limestone, [...]
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An extensive lighting program, included possibly because of Cities Service's role as an energy provider, [...]
You don't know for certain? "System" would be preferable instead of "program", too.- Done The lighting program is probably influenced by Cities Service's role, but the inclusion of the lighting might have been independent of the company.
The building contains four primary entrances [...]
Has four primary entrances.- Done
Robert A. M. Stern wrote that [...]
Who?- Fixed
Interior
[...] with the widest section of the lobby near Pine Street, there is an information booth.
Add a "where" before "there".- Done
[...] composed of white and pink panels of marble [...]
Consider "panels of white and pink marble".- Done
Features
and serves a variety of dishes such as white bean hummus, cavatelli, and charred octopus.
Irrelevant.
Removed
"Spire" is not long enough to merit its own section.- Done moved up to the Design section. epicgenius (talk) 19:17, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
and Chrysler Building.
The Chrysler Building.- Done
History
operating numerous companies the manufactured-gas and electric utility sectors
Confusing.- Fixed
he formed the Pine Street Realty Company,
Why does this need boldface?- Removed
at a total cost of $2 million [...] and cost $7,000,000.
Inconsistent.- Fixed
Cortlandt F. Bishop
Who is this man and why does he own part of 70 Pine Street?- I clarified who he is. Back in the day, ground ownership was different than building ownership, so Bishop's estate retained ownership of land under part of the building. Dunno why that is. epicgenius (talk) 19:17, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
Referencing
References are reliable. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
External link check revealed that citations [13], [22], [29], [35], [36], [37], [41], [50], [53], [60], [68], [76], [77], [81], [82], [83], [87], [91], [92], [107], [108] and [117] may be broken, and that [14] is a redirect.–♠Vami_IV†♠ 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)- The reason for that is because these are ProQuest links, NY Times links, or other links that the tool may mistakenly flag as broken (if I think it's what I think it is). I have archived every source now. epicgenius (talk) 13:09, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
There are three Template:Cite books without the location parameter. I am unable to find the first, but the other two are citation [62] and Abramson's book under "Sources".- I removed these to be consistent, since I don't think the location matters all that much if the publisher is notable. epicgenius (talk) 16:06, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
GA progress
CopyVio scan revealed a 43.2% likelihood of duplication from this source, but investigating I found the damage to mostly be quotations and names. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
Images are relevant to the article and free/tagged. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 10:08, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
- @Vami IV: Thanks for the review. I have addressed all your comments. epicgenius (talk) 13:09, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
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