Talk:5 to 7/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:06, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will start the review soon. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:06, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

The body of the article mentions the overall gross figure as $674,579; the gross field in the infobox shows $675,000. Any reason?

Template:Infobox film recommends using "condensed, rounded values", so I rounded to the nearest thousand. 97198 (talk) 14:07, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Yelchin plays Brian, a young writer who has an affair with an older married French woman, Arielle (Marlohe). -- rather than young and old, i think it is better to mention their ages.
Please mention the name of Arielle's husband in the lead.
The premise was inspired by a French couple in an open marriage whom Levin met in the 1980s -- Is it the film's premise or the story's?
"He wrote the first draft of the film in 2007 and the project remained in development for seven further years due to casting difficulties" -- i suggest to rewrite this sentence as: Though the film's first draft was completed in 2007, the project remained in development phase for seven further years due to casting issues.
I don't think so that mentioning the word "classical" for the background score in the lead is appropriate. Is there any other genre of sound used?

I removed the word from the lead since I agree it didn't sound great, but "classical" is the word the director used to describe the music in a couple of sources which are cited in the production section.

"5 to 7 premiered at the Tribeca Film Festival on April 19, 2014. It also screened at the 2014 Traverse City Film Festival, where it won the Audience Award for Best American Film." -- the word "was" is missing in two places.

Plot

The closing parenthesis is missing for Yelchin in the first line of the plot summary.
"After their second meeting, she reveals that she is married to a diplomat, Valery" -- i suggest to replace the first she with Arielle to avoid close repetition of words.
"After three weeks Brian decides to meet again with Arielle." -- i suggest to reword it as: After three weeks, Brian decides to meet Arielle.
"One day Brian is approached on the street by Valery, who knows about Brian's affair with Arielle and invites him to dinner at their home." -- i suggest to reword it as: Valery, who is aware of Brian's affair with Arielle, meets him on a street and invites to his house for dining with them.
"When Brian is invited to a New Yorker ceremony to receive an award of one..." -- award for is better.
"He then give Brian a check for $250,000 for "expenses" and leaves." -- gives is better than give.

Production

"He said that he only conceived the full plot of the film after his children were born in the early 2000s" -- i suggest you to reword it as: He conceived the complete plot after his children's birth in the early 2000s.
In the third paragraph, a comma is required after February 2013.
"Levin originally imagined that the film would have a jazz soundtrack but decided after filming that classical music would fit better." -- I suggest you to reword it as: Levin initially planned to use a jazz soundtrack but found classical music apt after completing the filming.
Both images used are free and devoid of issues, which is quite appreciable.

Release

"5 to 7 premiered at the Tribeca Film Festival on April 19, 2014" -- 5 to 7 "was" premiered sounds better.
Similarly, "and went on to screen" -- "and went on to be screened".
A comma before ref no. 16 is required.
I think the whole paragraph can be divided into two, with IFC films starting the second paragraph.
Please use United States instead of U. S.

Reception

In Peter Keough's review for The Boston Globe, is it really important to mention Marlohe's performance as Melancholic? I haven't seen the film, but if it is a critic's opinion, it is advised to use double quotations.
In Amy Nicholson's review for The Village Voice, i see something improper in the line "Amy Nicholson also felt that Brian was an unsympathetic and that his relationship with Arielle was not believable". Either say "Amy Nicholson found Brian unsympathetic, commenting that his relationship with Arielle was not believable" or "Amy Nicholson opined that Brian was an unsympathetic person whose relationship with Arielle was not believable".

Thanks, I was missing the word "character". 97198 (talk) 14:07, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

References

No dead links, quite appreciable.

Conclusion

A small, simple and interesting article. Once all the above issues are addressed, i shall be glad to promote this. Until then, i am keeping it on hold and am waiting for seven days. Good luck! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:35, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Pavanjandhyala: Thank you for your thorough review and useful suggestions! You picked up quite a few of my errors and improved the wording. I have made all the changes you suggested and have left a couple of replies to specific points above. 97198 (talk) 14:07, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Congratulations! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:28, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Pavanjandhyala! 97198 (talk) 07:12, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]