Talk:3rd Congress of the Indonesian Democratic Party/GA2
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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 22:07, 15 January 2020 (UTC)
Opening Kingsif (talk) 22:07, 15 January 2020 (UTC)
Style
[edit]- Level of English poor throughout, including lead. To the point I can barely understand it, and don't understand what some parts are trying to say.
- Lead about the right length
- On structure:
- 'Nominations' is a very vague header and should be written sentence style, i.e. Nominations for PDI chairman (same goes for 'Opening', 'Candidates', 'Announcement')
- 'Reaction' should be its own section, of which 'Formation of CEC' would presumably a subsection
- Fail things to work on from a structural perspective - detailed comments on writing would be too long and unnecessary, as it needs completely rewriting
Coverage
[edit]- Lots of background detail, maybe too much?
- On the other hand, there seem to be some acronyms and people mentioned with no introduction - what are these things?
- Probably a good amount of detail on the event, though hard to tell
- Needs work
Illustration
[edit]- Suitable image of new chairman, and table
- I can't find any context for the Sabam Sirait image, so I don't know
- Both photos PD
- ?
Neutrality
[edit]- No idea
Stability
[edit]- History fine
- Pass
Verifiability
[edit]- I don't know of the reliability of Indonesian sources, nor do I speak the language. I've asked for help at the Indonesia project here.
- There are inline citations
- ?
Copyright
[edit]- Two PD images
- Can't check offline foreign language text myself
- ?
Overall
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The level of English gives this a quick fail - it can't be understood, if I were reviewing this as a new page I would suggest it goes to Draft or at least tag it with a translation template. Kingsif (talk) 22:23, 15 January 2020 (UTC)