Talk:2nd Canadian Division during World War II/GA1

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GA Review

Typo in the first sentence wasn't a good start... ;)

("The 2nd Canadian Infantry Division was and..." I fixed that and a few other typos.)

In terms of outstanding issues:

WP:DASH Lots of dash issues here. You should have an endash in-between dates. So 1944–1945 When we have a dash as a separator, you should have an emdash so Order of battle—1944–1945 I think I caught them all for you.

I think I've got them all (there were a few date ones that were still emdashes), although it wouldn't hurt to do one more check of it. Cam (Chat) 16:41, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Dates, make sure you are consistent. Some of them are unlinked, particularly in the Battle of Normandy section. I would suggest, though no way impose, that you don't link the dates in this article as many of them are dates without years.
What is the Canadian way for depicting the Second World War? I thought it was the Commonwealth Second World War rather than the more American WWI/World War II/World War Two. Anyway, make sure it is consistent.

I think you might be right on that one (although I have seen both, though "Second World War" is more common). Fixed the few instances. Cam (Chat) 16:41, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Is that really the only descriptive image for the infobox? A blue square seems a bit strange to be honest. (though of course, I do understand its relevance, just don't think the general reader will). Perhaps explain the significance of the flash in the caption?

Ironically enough, that was only their shoulder-emblem until 1941! I've found the newer one, I'll just retouch it, and then upload it later. Cam (Chat) 17:00, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

In the 1941-continued training "...and was adopted throughout the Army." Which army? The Canadian? British? Allied?

Fixed. "All commonwealth forces in Britain". Hope that's better. Cam (Chat) 17:00, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

In the last section, "But a path to the Rhine River had been cleared;" That "but" is very sudden. But what, what is this related to? That needs rephrasing.

Done. Cam (Chat) 19:49, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"...loomed in their path." Seems a bit colloquial, which seems to be an issue elsewhere in the text. Before A-Class, I recommend a good copyedit.

Fixed that instance as well. I'll get the copyedit from someone once the review is over. Cam (Chat) 19:49, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've started doing some of it myself. I'll keep working on it this week (not sure why I didn't spot the colloquial stuff before, it does stick out quite a bit;) Cam (Chat) 07:21, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

So a few issues before I can promote it. I have done a few fixes, but the above issues are outstanding. Regards. Woody (talk) 15:16, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

thanks very much for the quick response! Cam (Chat) 17:00, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Passed

Great, after those fixes, it meets the Good Article criteria. Thanks for being so responsive. Woody (talk) 17:43, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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