Talk:21st Waffen Mountain Division of the SS Skanderbeg/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:09, 23 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The survivors were incorporated: it was disbanded on 1 November 1944 and was incorporated into the 7th SS
This is awkward. Do you mean "mainly taken from"... Also the reader already knows that the banovinas were Yugoslav. And what's a banovina, explain or link. Italian Albania was expanded to include adjacent parts of Yugoslavia mainly excised from the Yugoslav banovinas
Also awkward. And was Kosovo part of the above mentioned banovinas? With the region of Kosovo being annexed to Albania, Kosovo Albanians welcomed the Italian occupation enthusiastically.
The article needs a good copyedit. Please contact Diannaa (talk · contribs) or anyone from the WP:GOCE|Guild of Copyeditors for assistance and let me know once it has been edited so I can continue this review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:58, 25 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done -- Dianna (talk) 02:28, 25 May 2013 (UTC) I have now done two passes and am satisfied the prose meets the GA guideline. If there's a lot more new material added another pass might be required. -- Dianna (talk) 17:35, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks for taking this on so quickly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:37, 25 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Brillant, I'll look at this later today.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:52, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The last sentence of the last para in the Background section needs to be removed unless a cite can be found that supports the statements. P. 165 of Lepre doesn't not refer to anything other than the use of I./28 as a cadre for the division. Page number(s) to support the formation of the Albanian battalion need to be added.
Change disarm division battalions to "disarm battalions of the division"

Done.

Clarify this to ensure that the reader understands that both the division and the kampgruppe withdrew: The division withdrew across the Drina
Not thrilled about the uniform picture. Can't you find a picture of division members in combat or on parade or something that will be copyright free?

I've added a picture of the division's recruiting poster.

Done.

Fixed.

External links good as are picture licenses.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:34, 27 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Don't forget my point about the last sentence of the last para in the background section above. It's the last thing that needs to be addressed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:09, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry about that Sturm, I was curious to see where that came from and it took some finding. Way before my time...[1]! I re-instated it verbatim after the Lepre refs were removed... whoops. Anywho, gone now and I fixed the Lepre ref to the recruitment of the Albanians. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 06:30, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]