Talk:2023–24 College Football Playoff/GA1
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Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 07:27, 14 February 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 04:05, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello PCN02WPS, I'll review this for GA status. 750h+ | Talk 04:05, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Sections
[edit]Lead
[edit]By virtue of their victories, Michigan and Washington faced each other in the national championship game, held on January 8 in Houston.
Change "By virtue of" to "Because of" or "As a result of" (some people might not instantly understand what that means. 750h+ | Talk 04:11, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Changed as recommended. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
...College Football Playoff poll playing in two semifinals with the winners of each...
add a comma after "semifinals". 750h+ | Talk 04:17, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Changed as recommended. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Significant media criticism arose from the exclusion of Florida State, the first undefeated Power Five conference champion to be left out of the CFP.
For conciseness, maybe rephrase this to "Significant media criticism arose from Florida State's exclusion, the first undefeated Power Five conference champion left out of the CFP." 750h+ | Talk 04:17, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- I am hesitant to do this since "the first undefeated Power Five..." refers to Florida State instead of their exclusion, so that part of the sentence would have to be reworked as well. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Bracket
[edit]- Should there be references here? 750h+ | Talk 04:19, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- The template doesn't include references; my thought process was that (I think) everything in the bracket is covered with references in the prose. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Selection and teams
[edit]...were seen as a liability and potentially a reason to exclude them, though many analysts urged for their inclusion on the basis of their undefeated record...
change "on the basis of" to "based on" for conciseness 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)Michigan and Washington were generally seen as guaranteed bids, while the teams in the final two spots were more debated between Florida State, Texas, and Alabama in particular.
this sentence is excessively wordy. Maybe rephrase to "Michigan and Washington were considered guaranteed bids, while the final two spots were debated between Florida State, Texas, and Alabama." 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Both changed as recommended. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- The table, titled "2023 College Football Playoff rankings top six progression", is not sourced. Is it supposed to be? 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- It's directly from 2023 NCAA Division I FBS football rankings; I will add an attribution notice to the talk page to cover that. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Playoff games
[edit]Semifinals
[edit]The Wolverines led by three points at halftime and maintained this lead through to the fourth quarter, when Alabama scored a touchdown.
remove the comma. 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)Alabama on a Jase McClellan rush and Michigan on a J. J. McCarthy pass.
add a comma after "rush". 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Both done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Sugar Bowl
[edit]...the sixth all-time meeting between the two...
change "the two" to "them" for conciseness. 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Changed to "their sixth all-time meeting" PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Washington opened the scoring on their first drive through Dillon Johnson and Texas tied the game on their next drive.
add a comma after "Johnson". 750h+ | Talk 04:34, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Added. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Both teams scored twice more before halftime, making the score 21–21.
is "more" necessary. 750h+ | Talk 04:37, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- I think it's helpful because it makes sure the reader knows that I'm not including the touchdowns each team scored that I've already mentioned. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Their next three plays resulted in no yardage gained and they failed to score on 4th & Goal...
add a comma after "gained" 750h+ | Talk 04:37, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Championship
[edit]Both teams scored on their opening drives and Michigan scored again on their second drive.
add a comma after "drives". 750h+ | Talk 04:37, 8 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Aftermath
[edit]- This section passes; there's nothing wrong with it. 750h+ | Talk 04:39, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Source review
[edit]Florida State, who lost their starting quarterback Jordan Travis in their next-to-last regular season game against North Alabama,
is supported by reference 12, confirmed.The Longhorns' sole loss had come by four points to No. 12 Oklahoma.
is supported by reference 23, confirmed.ACC commissioner Jim Phillips also criticized the committee, calling the decision "unfathomable".
is supported by reference 27, confirmed.- All is supported by reliable sources, so that is a sourcing pass. 750h+ | Talk 04:44, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Images
[edit]Could we supply any images to the article? Even if they are the closest bit related that would illustrate the article well. 750h+ | Talk 04:47, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- I will add some pictures from the CFPNCG article. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:36, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
Verdict
[edit]Overall this is a fine article, but the extremely minor concerns need to be addressed above. After that, I'd be happy to pass the artie for WP:GA.
- @750h+: thank you for the review! Everything changed or responded to above. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 14:37, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- OK. So pictures are not a requirement for GAs, so I will pass this article even before you add them. Congrats! 750h+ | Talk 14:40, 8 April 2024 (UTC)