Talk:2022 USFL championship game/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 06:30, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:08, 1 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Lede

It was the inaugural USFL Championship Game and the final game of the 2022 USFL season. - would probably move this down to after we explain what the USFL is. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:02, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
of the United States Football League - needs the acronym in brackets after. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:02, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
games, the - colon needed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:02, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Lede should cover what tv networks covered and prize money was on the line Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:02, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Done all - if more explanation is needed as to what the USFL is, let me know. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:15, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General

The body doesn't give much of a background, it just suggests that you already know about the USFL. I'd like a sentence or two explaining what the league is and such. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Added a paragraph with some background on the old USFL and the founding and start of the new USFL. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:58, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Is it normal to use the teams suffix "stars, stallions etc" rather than the name of the place? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, that is very common in American football. It is especially common with professional level football (like the NFL, for example), where teams are referred to primarily by their nicknames ("Saints", "Giants", "Patriots", etc.) as opposed to the geographic-based actual name of the team ("New Orleans", "New York", "New England", etc.). PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:31, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
There'squite a few duplicate links. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I removed the link to "punt" in the first paragraph of the "First Half" section and the link to "Devin Gray" in the image caption under "Second Half" - I like to keep the links within the statistics section even if they are duplicated in the text as it is much easier for readers looking at that section to find the link within that table than it is for them to go searching through the prose of the rest of the article for a certain link, though I'm not sure that such a guideline exists in writing on WP. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:45, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The Stallions stayed unbeaten with a victory over 2022 USFL Draft No. 1 selection Shea Patterson and the Michigan Panthers, 33–17, - why are we mentioning a specific player? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I mentioned Patterson specifically because he was the No. 1 pick in the USFL draft, but upon reading that again I do agree it is unnecessary. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:31, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The match summary seems entirely sourced to one citation - do no others mention it at all? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I have added in references from a few more sources - there's only so much variation in what can be objectively said about the events of the game so I didn't see the need to include a ton more different sources all saying the same thing. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:45, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The statistics section is completely broken on mobile. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- See point below. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:31, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
These should absolutely not be done in three div cols like that. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:10, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed so that it displays properly on mobile, thank you for bringing that to my attention. I changed to the formatting to the same that is seen in the "statistics" section of UEFA Euro 2016 Final (FA). PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:31, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Where is the scoring history sourced too? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:14, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Added the source footnote to the game summary template. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:31, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:08, 1 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Lee Vilenski Thank you for the review! I believe I've addressed all of your comments - let me know if anything else needs adding or touching up! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:59, 11 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.