Talk:2019 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:59, 19 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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Consider constraining the ToC even down to just the top-level headers, there's a huge amount of whitespace at the top of the article right now.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:54, 24 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Trump became the eleventh.." was it Trump's first ever world title?

Added a bit about that - it is pretty notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:57, 24 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

John Higgins doesn't need disambiguation.
- Fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:00, 24 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"20 April–6 May 2019" spaced en-dash.
- Fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:00, 24 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No mention of Betfred in the lead (e.g. "(also referred to as the Betfred World Snooker Championships for the purposes of sponsorship)" or something similar?)
- added some Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"The previous year's championship was " Think there's a risk we've lost where we are with this current year as we've delved into some of the history of the tournament, so perhaps reinforce that it was the 2018 championship.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"twenty rankings events" surely just "ranking"?
- changed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"world rankings (revision 10)," as per a previous review, not sure on "revision 10" without explanation.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" as best of 19 frames" -> " as the best of 19 frames" etc.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"as twenty-two wildcard" 22.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"women's world champion" piped to a redirect.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
You could actually name her too, along with the others you've highlighted in that list.
- Not really sure how I could. I don't name the Amateur world champion, just players who have played in the final of the world championship. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"three best of 19 frame matches" -> " three best-of-19-frame matches"
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"frame matches.[15][5]" ref order.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" equalling Stephen Hendry's 27 consecutive appearances" if it's equalling, no need to repeat the record, we'll assume it's the same...
"once: 2016).[15][5] " ref order.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" 2005).[15][5] O" again.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Main Stage " stage.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"128 players competed" avoid starting sentences with numbers.
- reworded. 14:43, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
"since 1999—made" you link this tournament, but it's the first time, e.g. when you list out when former champions won their titles, those tournaments aren't linked...
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"2006 World Champion Graeme Dott " put a The in front here.
- DoneBest Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"child" why not "12-year-old son" per the source?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"match. He accrued just 89" merge, "match, accruing just 89..."
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"and low points total." lowest.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Higgins gained a 6–3 lead after his initial session" -> "Higgins took a 6–3 lead after the initial session"
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" eight times in his previous 15 a" fifteen.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Is "baulk" listed in the glossary? I would link it if so.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"world number 2" two (to be consistent).
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"but fell apart on a simple red" not encyclopedic in tone. Do you mean he just missed it?
- Reworded Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"post session" I would hyphenate.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"16th seeded David Gilbert..." avoid starting with a number
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC).[reply]
"2019 Masters winner " again, add a The.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"was "shit".[69][71][70]" order.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"4th seed Neil Robertson, lost" avoid number starts...
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"In a repeat of the 2011 World Championship final, Judd Trump captured his maiden World Championship title." mildly confusing because if it's a repeat of the final, he can't be capturing his maiden title...!
- reworded - could be too wordy. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"by Stephen Hendry, .[93] " remove comma and space.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Six-time champion Steve Davis " I think you've mentioned him being a "six-time champ" a few times now...
- Yeah, got rid Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Referee: Leo Scullion.[104]" no full stop required.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
(Just an aside, we're going to need to work on a solution for that summary table. It's ok but nothing more...! Future project...)
- Yeah, I've been meaning to put time into this... But it's servicable. It's not really my area, but I'll take a look. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:49, 29 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Pang Junxu isn't linked in the prose but is in the qualifying tables (but only once)...
- Removed - he isn't notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"100 centuries..." same again.
- Reworded Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"122 century breaks..." ditto.
- Ditto Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I wonder if it's beneficial to include in parentheses how many each player made, to avoid having to count up the scores?
- Potentially - This would potentially be allowable under WP:COUNT. Is this a deathnail, as I'd like to talk this one through with the Wikiproject before going ahead. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"by World Snooker internationally " here you use italics, but earlier on (Hearn) you don't, be consistent.
- removed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Be consistent in the refs with "the Guardian" and "The Guardian" and linking.
- Fixed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 43, e.g., you don't need "sport, Guardian" as the author.
- Caught it Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:16, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's sufficient for a first pass I think. Let me know if anything's unclear, otherwise I'll see you soon! The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:36, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Quick warning, it may take me a little time to get to this one - a little busy with something else, but I am on it. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:54, 24 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, I'm on holiday until Friday so my time here is going to be intermittent! The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:11, 25 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

- The Rambling Man Hope you had a good holiday, think I got it all. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:24, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks. I'll take a look in the next couple of days. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:27, 30 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Happy with the changes and the quality of the article now easily meets/exceeds the GA criteria, so I'm passing this article. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:33, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your time TRM! I'll try and do a little more cleanup before I nominate for FA (My current FAC just needs a source review before I can nominate another). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:56, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]