Talk:2019 Q School/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 15:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

As promised, I'll be taking a look at this! — Ghost River 15:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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Organised by World Snooker, entries for the event cost £1,000 and there was no maximum number of participants. Would suggest rewording, as currently the opening clause "Organised by World Snooker" describes the subject "entries", where I think you mean that the event was organised by the association.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Each event was open to an unlimited amount of entrants" is redundant to the sentence that came before. Removing it will also allow the first paragraph to be entirely in past-tense, and the second to be entirely in present-tense.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Change the comma after "Twelve players qualified from the events" to a colon.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Those "Four more players" should be around parentheticals, or otherwise reordered to allow for punctuation
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:10, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This section also alternates between past and present tense; since this talks about the Q School more generally, and formats that are the same every year, I would recommend consistent present tense
- I've reordered to better show where we are talking about Q School, and when we talk about the 2019 events.
Pipe "knockout" to One-game playoff
- Actually I've piped to single-elimination tournament, as a one-game playoff is something different. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"based on the amount of frames" → "based on the number of frames" (amount is general, number is specific)
- Ok Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:08, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"were tied at 3–3 and the match was decided"
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Xu Si had been demoted from the tour the previous season defeated fellow Chinese player Wang Zepeng 4-2. Missing phrase in the middle. Also, make sure to switch the hyphen to an en dash at the end
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Another hyphen vs. em-dash towards the end of the second paragraph
- fixed with script. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"before these matches happened" → "before these matches occurred"
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The header is capitalized, whereas the term "order of merit" in the section is not. If not a proper title, would suggest changing it to "Order of merit" per MOS:SECTIONCAPS

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Ping me if there are any questions. — Ghost River 15:25, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

- I have addressed all of the above GhostRiver, thanks for your review. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:11, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - Looks good on my end, promoting now! — Ghost River 15:58, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]