Talk:2019 AFL Women's Grand Final

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Review: March 15, 2020. (Reviewed version).

A fact from 2019 AFL Women's Grand Final appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 8 May 2019 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that 53,034 people attended the 2019 AFL Women's Grand Final, a record for a standalone women's sporting event in Australia?

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:2019 AFL Women's Grand Final/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 04:39, 4 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Let's see if I get around to reviewing this over the weekend. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:39, 4 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Per MOS:BOLDLINKAVOID, don't link AFL Women's Grand Final in the bold.
Y Unlinked. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
2019 AFL Women's season, the league's third season. <<<=== How about "2019 AFL Women's competition" to avoid repeating "season"?
Y Remove repetition. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
a record for an standalone <<<=== typo "an"
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would suggest stating the score and/or something like... Adelaide took a big lead by half time.
Y Score stated. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would suggest following anterior cruciate ligament with "(ACL)" since the abbreviation is very commonly-used.
Y Abbreviation added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background

joined the competition in 2019 <<<=== specify "the AFL Women's competition"
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
the competition was lopsided <<<=== I'd prefer "the conferences were unbalanced".
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The two teams that finished the highest in each conference at the end of the home-and-away season qualified for the preliminary finals. <<<=== Clarify opposite prelims (i.e. 1st in A plays 2nd in B).
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The Carlton Blues, which was <<<=== Should it be "which were"?
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
much, much worse <<<=== one "much" is enough
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Can you link wooden spoon? (or state it means last place)
Y Linked per WP:WHAAOE. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The Crows went on to an impressive season, notching up seven games by an average of 40 points, with their only loss for the season being by a single point in the first round match against the Western Bulldogs, when they kicked an inaccurate 1.11, and finished on top of Conference A. <<<=== I would suggest splitting this into two sentences.
Y Split. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In the above sentence, what does "notching" mean?
"To score or achieve (something)" Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
At the end of the second paragraph, you're missing a sentence on how Carlton did during the regular season.
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In the lead up to the match <<<=== specify "their prelim"
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You could describe the image of Tayla Harris. (maybe "displaying her athleticism" or something...)
Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
misogynist internet trolls <<<=== How about "internet trolls who were regarded as misogynistic"?
No, per WP:WEASEL. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Venue

Can you link "minor premiers"?
Y Linked per WP:WHAAOE. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Brisbane Lions should just be Brisbane for consistency?
We are using the template, and this is the first time it appears. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
a record for an standalone <<<=== "an" again
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Teams

Is "line ups" supposed to be two separate words?
Y Merged into one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Match summary

50-metre penalty caused by ===>>> 50-metre penalty on
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
who were caught behind ===>>> who were caught too far from the goal
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
high tackle from Sarah Hosking ===>>> high tackle by Sarah Hosking (to avoid two "from"s)
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
One perfect kick later ===>>> One accurate kick later (I don't think "perfect" sounds encyclopedic)
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The crowd barely had time to cheer before she had delivered it to ===>>> She played on immediately (same concern)
Y Changed, but with "immediately", which sounds like a tautology to me. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It did not stop Ponter, who marked a delivery from Jones inside the goal square for her second. ===>>> That did not stop Adelaide's control of the game, as Ponter marked a delivery from Jones inside the goal square for her second a minute later. (It doesn't sound like Ponter specifically was related to Scheer's injujry.)
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
That looked like it for the quarter, but when the siren sounded Jones still had a free kick at goal. ===>>> After the siren, Jones still had one last free kick at goal.
Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
A pass from Forth and Phillips marked 40 metres out, and had her second goal of the match <<<=== The grammar in this sentence is a bit confusing. It doesn't sound like Phillips is the one kicking the goal.
Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
But then, Phillips went down ===>>> With a few minutes remaining in the quarter, Phillips went down
Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In the image caption, you can state "best on the ground" instead of "player of the match".
Y Changed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Media coverage

Okay.

Overall

At times, the match summary reads more like commentary (albeit pretty good commentary!) than an encyclopedia article. I'm okay with most of it, but I pointed a few things out.
And I've changed them. I've been accused of sounding more like the history channel than the historian. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:22, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Two Canberra Times links don't work: one and two
Fixed these. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 04:02, 15 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No dab links.
Well-sourced.

Overall, it's in good shape! Above are some suggestions. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:13, 11 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hawkeye7: Okay, passing! Do you want to list the article under the "Women in Green" sports section for articles promoted to GA in 2020? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:29, 15 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sure. I thought you already did for some reason. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 04:04, 15 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]