Talk:2018 Paris ePrix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 16:49, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

• Might as well do this one, too. Courcelles (talk) 16:49, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

• " unsuccessfully tried to overtake him. " Needs another word.
• "clinch his third victory of the season." There's a lot of names before this his, and they're all male.
• "Construction of the circuit took around six days with workers using 5,000 t (11,000,000 lb) of material shipped to the Port" As a statistic, the GA criteria require a direct citation. Also, why are we using pounds and not, as the French would, kilograms?
• "starting order was determined " -> "starting order for the ePrix was determined"
• "first group's top five drivers." Given each group only had five drivers, this is a "duh" thing to explicitly say.
• "which meant everyone had to use 4% for the rest of the ePrix" If they had 40%, why could they only use 4%?
• Other than Abt, who were the other two drivers with FanBoost?
• "I wanted to win this year it was clearly Paris" is missing the closing quotation marks

Everything else looks fine. Courcelles (talk) 17:19, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

@Courcelles: All of the above suggestions have been implemented. The winners of the FanBoost can be found in the first paragraph of the race sub-section. MWright96 (talk) 18:15, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

Missed that, sorry. Promoted. Courcelles (talk) 18:43, 28 July 2018 (UTC)