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Sheev1 (talk) 08:29, 3 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Added all information in the Details section of the Chinese article which were missing from this English article, correcting incorrect English grammar as necessary according to this editor's fluent Chinese knowledge. Significant factual corrections were also made according to the Chinese text, which was corroborated with the Chinese sources to verify that the Chinese article had the verifiable version of facts in each conflict. The corrections were:

1. Changed 'large park areas of the city' to 'Dayuan road section', since '大園路段' is a specific civil-geographical location and not a description.
2. Changed 'policemen' to 'A policeman and a male civilian'.
3. Changed 'even though they had a chance to escape' to 'had no time to escape'.
4. The corpses were not described by the Chinese article as being 'stacked for 5 rows from the escape door', they were rather described as 'stacked at the escape door that was located five rows from the front of the bus'. I made a correction accordingly.
5. Changed 'severed barrier grip' to the meaningful and correct 'jammed by the broken road fence'.

I have also added some information from the 'Response Proceedings' section of the Chinese art. which was wholly missing from this article. However, I have only added the parts of info that were not repeated in previous sections of the current English article. This was done to prevent repetition, and also to prevent Recentism, since all of the information in this '後續處理[编辑]' section was written in the present tense, indicating potential Recentism in the Chinese article due to using breaking news. Sheev1 (talk) 08:29, 3 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Made a broad review of the citations throughout this article, and made the following changes:

Added a new source for the sentence at the end of the details section, since the previous source did not contain information about the 37 bus accidents mentioned. Also, according to this new source, this 2016 event was only the first incident where the vehicle was completely destroyed, not the second, and hence the article’s statement was changed accordingly.
Added all citations that are found in the Chinese 'Investigations' section to the corresponding section in the English article, where there was previously no citations at all. Since changes to sentence structure are needed for translation to English (especially the addition of more full-stops and hence more sentences), the citations could not be placed at the same relative place in the text, and hence all citations in each paragraph were placed at the end of that paragraph. This is according to Wikipedia guidelines found here: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:CITEBUNDLE&redirect=no . Hopefully this has improved verifiability for this section.
For the two citations at the end of the 'Initial Responses' section created in the previous edit, added more detail to the reference.

Sheev1 (talk) 10:58, 3 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]