Talk:2016 Paris ePrix

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Review: August 6, 2018. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Let us start this GA review . Kpgj hpjm 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Please change in the Les Invalides building complex before a crowd of 20,000 . to in the Les Invalides building complex . A total of 20,000 people attended the race . Kpgj hpjm 16:31, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Please change but lost his advantage to DiGrassi on the run to the first corner . to but was passed by DiGrassi on the run to the first corner. Kpgj hpjm 16:36, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Please change but retained his hold on third position . to but managed to retain the third position in the Championship . Kpgj hpjm 16:46, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: It's late night in my time zone , I will review the rest of the article tomorrow . Kpgj hpjm 17:09, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Background and preparation

1st paragraph

Please change Coming into the race from Long Beach 3 weeks earlier. to After winning the previous round at Long Beach 3 weeks earlier , Kpgj hpjm 03:07, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Please change and Jerome D Ambrosio for Dragon had seven points less in the battle for the position. to , seven ahead of Jerome D Ambrosio of Dragon in the battle for third position . Kpgj hpjm 05:35, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Second Paragraph

No issues

Third Paragraph

No issues

Fourth Paragraph

No real issues , but I will be making a few tweaks .

Practice and Qualifying

First Paragraph

In the first sentence remove the second occurrence of the word Sunday .
The team names in the parenthesis is not needed . Kpgj hpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Second Paragraph

No issues

Third Paragraph

No issues

Fourth Paragraph

Mostry OK , I have made a tweak though . Kpgj hpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Fifth Paragraph

@MWright96: : Can you say what is meant by lost time in the first second . I think it might be lost time in the first sector. Kpgj hpjm 15:48, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Race

This is the section with problems in many Motorsports articles .

First Paragraph

When the race started . Remove the word when and capitalise T in the .

Second Paragraph

Remove the word Nevertheless
A tweaks will be made by me here .

Third Paragraph

In the previous paragraph , it is stated that Buemi and Turvey were battling for fifth place , so when Buemi passed Turvey, he moved into fifth . So when he passed Sarrazin , that move should be for fourth .
Please fix this - if di Grassi was leading , Vergne second , Bird third , and as per above sentence Buemi fourth , then where did Prost come from .

Fourth Paragraph

Change due to the tight track to due to the tightness of the track .
Change used FanBoost to used his FanBoost - he can' use the FanBoost of others .

Fifth Paragraph

No issues

Post-Race

No issues

Classification

Question : Why are names of some drivers in bold ?

Comments

On-hold for now , @MWright96: On these issues are fixed , I will take a final look and then promote the article. The issues in the Race section's third paragraph are very important ,So please take some time to fix them . When you are done , please ping me . Kpgj hpjm 12:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Looks like all issues are fixed . Taking a final look . Kpgj hpjm 13:34, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: It's see no more issues , passing . Kpgj hpjm 13:42, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]