Talk:2015 Japanese Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:21, 29 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The year is missing after the date as is the standard in other GA race reports. Done Eagleash (talk) 08:14, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

For Carlos Sainz Jr, you use Sainz, Jr. and Sainz throuhgout the article. Only Sainz should be used as the need to disambiguate is not necessary. Done Eagleash (talk) 11:48, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Pirelli cites the nature of the track and the high lateral energy loads experienced in the corners, in particular 130R — typically taken at full throttle and top speed in dry weather racing — as reasons for the hardest tyres being used. The suppliers expect a performance difference of 0.6-0.8 seconds per lap between the compounds." - Change all the uses of present tense words to past tense words.
Spell out DRS and put the acronym in brackets.
"Mercedes were leading Ferrari by 153 points," - was?

Done apart from last point; discussion at nominator's talk-page. Eagleash (talk) 11:50, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done

"there were two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday and another one-hour session before qualifying on Saturday" - 1.5 hour should be reworded to 90-minute.
"as Valtteri Bottas saved wet weather tyres." - wet weather tyres needs hyphenating.
"Red Bull's Daniel Ricciardo was third," Red Bull's should be spelt as Red Bull driver.
"Behind Ricciardo, both Williams led the two Ferraris in a session marked by all drivers doing a lot of laps due to the limited running on Friday." - I feel this sentence should be rewritten.

Done Eagleash (talk) 12:07, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink red flag to Racing flags#Red flag as the non-motor sport expert will not understand what it is.
Change Manor Marussias to either Manor Marussia cars or drivers.

Done Eagleash (talk) 12:08, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You start many sentences with On lap xxx. Consider revising. Done
"Hamilton went into pit lane for a tyre change on lap 16." - You're missing the word "the" before pit lane. Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"with Williams in third an additional 129 points behind the Scuderia." - use a different word other than Scuderia.

Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. On hold until the issues have been rectified. Z105space (talk) 07:19, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I have done the rest, I believe. Thank you so much for your work, Eagleash! Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:57, 2 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All the points raised have been rectified. I hereby award this article GA status. Good work!