Talk:2015–16 York City F.C. season/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 10:56, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, let's give this a review. I've had a quick read through and it's on par with the previous seasons which are already at GA, and which passed without any issues. I'm sure it'll be a similar case here.

"The season ran from 1 July 2015 to 30 June 2016." Would be better to specify "The 2015-16 season ran..." as you were talking about the previous season in the sentence before.
- Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Background: More a general query than anything - was anything said why the blue stripe was added across the shirt? It just strikes me as a rather surprisingly bold change of kit (although I appreciate that York have changed thier kits a heck of a lot over the past few seasons).
- The kits sometimes have navy blue elements, much to the preference of us fans, but some seasons they don't. Not sure it's particularly noteworthy to mention in the article though. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Wycombe Wanderers, and they lost 3–0" - not sure about "and they lost". I think it'd read better either with "where" as you start the sentence talking about the away game, or "which".
- Reworded to "which they lost". Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"York then played League One team Bradford City in the first round of the League Cup" - worth saying it was a home game? Only because you refer to a team as the visitors in the next part of the sentence and at this point in the article it isn't immediately obvious which team that is. You'd need to move up the wikilink to Bootham Crecent from later in the paragraph if you do that.
- Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Lindon Meikle was released by mutual consent" - probably worthwhile saying "Following the game, Lindon..." just to keep the paragraph flowing.
- Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Zubar returned to Bournemouth after he suffered cruciate ligament damage during the Exeter match" Did he only return after the match with Swansea? Otherwise this would be better off following the Exeter game.
- The loan ended two days after the Swansea match. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"York lost 1–0 at home to fellow strugglers Newport, who had only appointed appointed their manager Warren Feeney a day earlier, after Aaron Collins scored in the eighth-minute" To avoid the connection between the signing of the manager with the eighth minute goal, end the sentence after "a day earlier" and then start a new sentence with "The loss came after Aaron Collins..."
- Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"York won successive home wins for the first time in 2015–16 after they beat Notts County 2–1" - since you don't mention the two victories at the same time, I'd suggest changing this to "York won successive home wins for the first time in 2015–16, beginning with a victory over Notts County 2–1"
- That would be incorrect, as the winning run (of sorts) started with the win v Stevenage on 30 January, followed by the win v Notts County on 13 February. Mattythewhite (talk) 16:05, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I've got. Placing the GAN on hold for the obligatory seven days. Miyagawa (talk) 10:56, 3 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Great, thanks for responding so quickly - sorry for not promoting quicker (I must have missed your edit on my watch list). Promoting to GA now. Miyagawa (talk) 09:34, 5 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing! Mattythewhite (talk) 10:10, 5 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]