Talk:2014 Brazilian Grand Prix
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Qualifying
[edit]The rules will undoubtedly be the same as last week's 18 car event. Would we agree until the FIA says otherwise? Twirlypen (talk) 03:24, 5 November 2014 (UTC)
- Let's wait until it's announced/confirmed. It will only be a couple of days at the most. DH85868993 (talk) 03:42, 5 November 2014 (UTC)
New pits section photo
[edit]http://www.f1fanatic.co.uk/wp-content/uploads/2014/11/interlagos-2014-pit-entry-2.jpg shows a nice shot of the new pit entry. Provided it doesn't violate any copywrite laws, would it be suitable to use in this and/or the Interlagos article? I'm thinking a before and after shot would be helpful. Twirlypen (talk) 02:29, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- That is a very good photo, and would be ideal, however I can't really see a way around copyrights easily. SAS1998―Talk 01:29, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
Qualifying session
[edit]I missed the entire session completely (it's my birthday, so I've been imbibing all weekend), but did the FIA change the 4+4 elimination procedure they used at the USGP? The table suggests a 5+3.. if it stayed 4+4, did Kvyat set a time in Q2? If Kvyat didn't set a time and it was 5+3, we ought to note this in the article. Twirlypen (talk) 02:20, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
- It stayed at 4+4 but Kvyat didn't go out in Q2. I've added "no time" for him in Q2 to indicate this. DH85868993 (talk) 02:32, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
Lap times
[edit]Anyone else notice that the lap times for this race were consistently and significantly quicker than the V8s of previous years? I know that the track was resurfaced and they used a softer tyre, but Nico's Q3 time was only one or two tenths off the all time lap record a decade ago when Ferrari had a 900hp V10. Twirlypen (talk) 23:38, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Zwerg Nase (talk · contribs) 14:41, 10 January 2018 (UTC)
I will try to finish this review asap. Zwerg Nase (talk) 14:41, 10 January 2018 (UTC)
Review
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
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Here are the issues I have encountered:
Lead:
- Wikilink pole position upon first mention.
Background
- I would strongly recommend moving the information about Caterham and Manor missing the GP from the last into the first paragraph, to the information about the other constructors who are taking part.
- I think you should state the points gap between Hamilton and Rosberg before the race.
- "Mercedes had so far dominated the season, with Ricciardo" - sounds like Ricciardo is part of Mercedes, a little rephrasing here would help clarify.
- Vettel is missing from the drivers having achieved a second-place finish.
- Fourth paragraph: Change the tense to past tense at "which has been proposed".
Practice and Qualifying
- "Hamilton was second fastest and locked his tyres" makes it sound like one is caused by the other.
- Reworded to make more sense. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- Third paragraph: As far as I remember, 2015 already had the rule that the Q3 drivers needed to use their tyres used in Q2. This should be clarified.
- Done
- I cannot find the information about the fuel pressure in Massa's car in the source given. Also, the phrasing is weird, I have never heard the phrase "fuel pressure getting into a car".
- Have sourced the claim to a article from Autosport and reworded the phrase in question. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
Race
- As in earlier reviews, I again had problems sometimes finding out who is meant with pronouns. For instance, in the third paragraph, you mention Hamilton, Rosberg and Hülkenberg in one sentence and then the next begins with "He informed his team", leading me to question: Who??
- "Rosberg was protected...using DRS to protect himself" - repetition.
- Fourth paragraph: add "lap" before "17".
- "The reduction of the lead was that Rosberg was aware" - I am not quite sure what this is supposed to mean?
- The changes I have made in regards to your query should have made it somewhat clearer. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- Fifth paragraph: "extending back following the", I'd change this to "extending back to the Malaysian Grand Prix"
- Sixth paragraph: "(after being delayed by slower traffic)" - again it is not immidiately clear who was delayed. Maybe switch it around, ditch the parantheses and just write: "Hamilton pushed hard following Rosberg's pit stop but was delayed by slower traffic and therefore emerged narrowly behind his teammate after making his own stop"?
- "Hamilton attacked but Rosberg" - I would rephrase: "Hamilton attacked Rosberg, who responded by...", which also resolves a repetition of "but" in the sentence.
- "On lap 61, Räikkönen [...] was pressured by Button" - two sentences earlier Button was given as being behind Massa??!
- Corrected to say Button was fifth at the time. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
Post-race
- I think "domination" is too POV to use here, try to find a more encyclopedic phrase.
- Removed. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- Second paragraph: Wikilink the 2012 race.
- "after the Williams had" - remove "the".
- Fourth paragraph: I'd add a comma behind "publications"? But English comma rules are still weird to me (are there even any?).
- I've changed it to say "Rosberg was praised by the press" instead. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- "to many pundits" is a bold claim if only one source follows.
- Reworded. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- "his life under rentless pressure" - I am sure that if Rosberg lived rent free in Monaco, his life would have less pressure. Relentless is probably the word you're searching for ;)
So much from me. Thank you for your great work thus far! Zwerg Nase (talk) 18:11, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- @Zwerg Nase: Thanks for the kind remark and again for reviewing the article. I have implemented the changes you have suggested and have made my own changes to some other parts of the article. MWright96 (talk) 20:46, 12 January 2018 (UTC)
- Looks good, I can pass this review. Congrats! Zwerg Nase (talk) 16:31, 13 January 2018 (UTC)