Talk:2013 Emirates Cup/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 18:09, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Might as well go ahead and finish the series for you. Give me a couple hours or so. Courcelles (talk) 18:09, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"the competition's inaugural edition was attended by over 110,000 people across the two days.[3]" Much like in the other review, I don't see the relevance of this.
"Portuguese outfit" Outfit means something entirely different to these American ears...
"The only goal of the game was scored by Felipe Melo," Who played for which team?
"The score ended 1–0;" I've read this paragraph a few times. It's totally unclear who won the game.
Talk about the matches in chronological order. This way is just confusing.

It's a summary of a pre-season tournament. IMO, there isn't a right or wrong way to go about reporting the action. The reason I changed it up was because I couldn't find differing/interesting info about the games, and when I wrote the summaries for the other cup editions it was tiring, repeating the same structure. Nevertheless, have tweaked this. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:23, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Yaya Sanogo was handed a chance to play up front for Arsenal" Handed? Kind of informal and meaningless.
"who made a mess of a chance in the 18th minute" Very informal language here.
What makes ref 5 reliable?

Hürriyet Daily News is Turkey's oldest English-language daily. According to their website, they are a nationwide daily. Have been sourced in many other publications like the NYT. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:23, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

in your tweaks, what was ref 5 in the reviewed version is now ref 4, Sport in the box. Courcelles (talk) 21:29, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Whoops, have removed this as I can't find any WP:RS, even on the BT website that explicitly states they (will/had) broadcast the event. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:54, 1 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Courcelles: thanks for taking this on. Have made corrections, hopefully to your liking. :) Lemonade51 (talk) 21:23, 31 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]