Talk:2013 Boston Marathon/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:33, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
Am reviewing for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:33, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- "The 2013 Boston Marathon was the 117th running of the annual marathon race in Boston, Unites States" - typo; should be United
- Also, a comma after the word "States" is missing
- "Lelisa Desisa won the elite men's race with a time of 2:10:22, and Rita Jeptoo won the women's race with a time of 2:26:25." - repetition of "race"
- "Hiroyuki Yamamoto won the men's wheelchair race in 1:25:32 and Tatyana McFadden won the women's race in 1:45:25." - same issue as above
- "The competition became suspended and many participants were unable to participate in the remainder of the competition." - repetition of "participate"
- Done all of the above.
Course
[edit]- "the runners enter the town of Natick, and enter the 'Scream Tunnel' at mile 12 once they have left the town." - repetition of both "enter" and "town"
- Reworded
- "that has been in place for over 100 years." - more than
- Done
- "followed by a 0.75 miles (1.21 km) climb at mile 16" - the adj=on field in the {{convert}} template is missing here
- Done
- "The first hill is a steep 1,200 yards (1,100 m) climb," - same issue as above
- Done
- "At half a mile long and with a 3.3% incline," - writing out the percent symbol is prefered per MOS:PERCENT
- Done
- "it isn't especially difficult," - no contractions please per MOS:CONTRACTIONS
- Done
- "but due to the hill being 20 miles (32 km) into the race, it is still feared." - why specially is the hill feared?
- Added a little more explanation using the source.
Field
[edit]- "The fastest competitor in the women's race was Meseret Hailu who had run 2:21:09 to win the 2012 Amsterdam Marathon and 1:08:55 to win the 2012 IAAF World Half Marathon Championships." - repetition of "to win"
- I'm not sure how to reword this and avoid confusion for the reader because it mentions two different distances so treating them separately adds clarification. I'll take a look later with fresh eyes.
- 2012 Chicago Marathon is linked twice
- Removed
- "The wheelchair race began at 9:17 EDT (UTC-4), the women's race at 9:32 EDT" - repetition of "race"
- Done
Race summary
[edit]- Hopkinton and Markos Geneti are overlinked
- Done
- "and climbed to 54 °F (12 °C) at the finish." - can be either rose or increased to avoid close paraphrasing of the USA Today source
- Reworded. I didn't write this so I didn't know it was so closely paraphrased.
- "Hiroyuki Yamamoto of Japan aimed to make a move at the 5 kilometres (3.1 mi) mark," - the adj=on field in the {{convert}} template is missing
- Done
- "In the men's race, Jason Hartmann and Fernando Cabada led the race" - repetition of "race"
- Done
Bombing
[edit]- "At 2:49 EDT, race clock time 4:09.43, almost two hours after the winners had completed the race," - repetition of "race"
- Removed
- Boston Athletic Association's acronyms should be in parentheses after the full name is mentioned for the first time
- Added
- Bronze shouldn't really be linked
- Removed link
Results
[edit]- Sources for the result should be with the results, rather than underneath the references section
- The sources for the results should be with the results, rather than underneath the references section
- Moved
- All tables should be MOS:DTABTUT compliant with the addition of "scope="col"s
- Added
- The athletes names in all the tables should be sorted by surname with the {{sortname}} template
- Placed names in the template.
References
[edit]- Reference 6 "WOMEN'S BOSTON UPDATES - 2013 Boston Marathon Live Updates" - no all words in capital letters please per MOS:ALLCAPS and the hyphen will need to be replaced by an en dash (–) per MOS:DASH
- Reference 10 "117th Boston Marathon - 2013 Preview"." the hyphen will need be replaced by an en dash (–) per MOS:DASH
- Reference 16 "2013 Boston Marathon Statistics" is missing the work
- Reference 17 "Explosions rock Boston Marathon, several injured" is missing the two authors and the title needs to be update to the current one
- Reference 20 "Boston Marathon Runners Sidelined by Bombings Feel 'Angry,' 'Disappointed'" is missing the author, work and publication date
- Reference 21 "Boston invites stopped runners back" is missing Associated Press as the agency
- Done made amendments to the above references.
Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 19:43, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: thanks very much, once again, for a thorough review. Definitely some things to bare in mind before I nominate anymore marathon articles for GA. I believe I have fixed or removed all the issues you mentioned. Kind regards, Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 17:05, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
- @Willbb234: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 20:47, 9 March 2021 (UTC)