Talk:2010 AAA 400/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Resolute 16:38, 20 December 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• The American Flag in the infobox title should be removed per WP:MOSFLAG. This appears to be a function of the infobox however, and is something the NASCAR project should discuss.
  •  Removed Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "it was the 28th, as well as the second race in the Chase for the Sprint Cup during the 2010 NASCAR Sprint Cup Series season." -- How is it both the 28th and second race in the Chase? Consider rewording: "it was the 28th race during the 2010 NASCAR Sprint Cup Series season and the second in the Chase for the Sprint Cup."
•  Done Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "Some of the Chase for the Sprint Cup participants, such as, Clint Bowyer and Tony Stewart were in the top-ten for most of the race, but halfway through the race all of them had problems, like speeding penalties and contact with the wall." -- This reads rather awkwardly. Consider rewording along the lines of "some of the participants, including name (speeding penalty) and name (contact with the wall) were in the top ten for much of the race before suffering problems."
  •  Done Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "Afterward, during qualifying, forty-six cars were entered, but only forty-three were able because of NASCAR's qualifying procedure." -- Able to what? Able to participate in the qualification round, or able to qualify for the main race?
  •  Done
• "...with a time of 23.116." -- should specify the unit. 23.116 seconds.
  •  Done Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "When the drivers pitted, Allmendinger remained the leader, but Johnson lost three positions to fifth." -- Kinda sucks that fifth took three positions from Johnson. "Johnson lost three positions, falling to fifth."
  •  Done Wow. :) Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "Tony Stewart was the only team to change only two tires, which resulted in him losing position quickly." - This confuses me, as in most pit stops, teams change two or four tires, so logically, changing only two should allow the driver to move up. That implies to me that everybody else changed no tires? If so, should be clarified. Also, you don't need to note a second time that Stewart changed two tires (two paragraphs later).
  •  Done: Everyone else took four tires, which mean't that they were faster. He might have started infront, but when the race resumed he lost positions. Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• "Ten laps later, Johnson reclaimed the lead after Allmendinger pitted. Following his pit stop, he was one lap behind in twenty-seventh." -- This makes no sense. Who is "he", and which pit stop are you referring to? There appears to have been two or three by that point of the race. If it is Johnson, clarify that he had been in 27th at some point before coming back up to reclaim the lead.
  •  Done Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• There were a lot of disjointed statements in the race section caused by unnecessary commas. I've reworded several statements to simplify them and remove those commas. Please check that I did not inadvertently change the meaning of a passage to something you did not intend.
  • I made that mistake on the previous race before this one. You didn't change the meaning of any of the statements. Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• I am curious as to why there is no mention of the standings in the Chase.
  • There is at the main bottom under the 'Standings after the race' section, as well as under the 'Post-race' section. Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
    • Oh. I had assumed that the Chase had its own points system for races specific to it. My bad. Resolute 23:14, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
• Images and references look good.
  • Great! Nascar1996 20:39, 20 December 2010 (UTC)

Overall, it is a very good article. Just needs the prose fixed in a few areas, after which I will pass it. Cheers, Resolute 16:38, 20 December 2010 (UTC)

I finished revising the article be meet the requirements. Nascar1996 20:39, December 20, 2010 (UTC)

Looks good, I'm now passing it. Cheers, Resolute 23:14, 20 December 2010 (UTC)