Talk:2009 International Bowl/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC) I will review this tonight; my apologies for the delay. I may split it between tonight and tomorrow since this is a long article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"led by running back Donald Brown's 208 yards rushing, dominated the first half statistically," 208 yards in the half? Just making sure that's right, very impressive if true. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear}
- That is indeed correct; here is another source for verification: [1]. –Grondemar 07:07, 26 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Team selection

"The International Bowl contracted with the Big East and Mid-American Conferences to select teams to participate in their annual game." Contracted sounds a bit odd; reword.
- I changed it to "The International Bowl had contracts with the Big East and Mid-American Conferences that allowed them to select one team from each conference to participate in their annual game." How does that sound? –Grondemar 02:12, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The two teams played each other for six consecutive seasons" in six.. sounds better I think.
- Agreed, corrected. –Grondemar 02:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Any of the "# yards" stuff needs a non breaking space, i.e. 27 yards. Why I'm not positive, but that's what it says to do.
- I believe I have added non-breaking spaces wherever required; please let me know if I missed any. –Grondemar 02:55, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The Huskies easily won their first game 35–3 against FCS opponent Hofstra." Link FCS. I know it means Division I-AA, but others may not.
- I had a note I was planning to add to the Notes section explaining FBS / FCS, but I keep getting Cite.php errors (see the linked revision). If you have any idea how to fix this error please let me know. –Grondemar 03:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Strike the above, I see that they added an explanation to WP:FOOT of the bug; apparently the #tag workaround only works once with list-defined references. When I moved the note out of the LDRs, it worked fine. Hopefully they will fix that bug eventually. –Grondemar 03:31, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Link Temple in the following sentence, as well as other schools whose football programs weren't linked.
- I didn't link Temple because they were previously linked in the Buffalo section; the Big East teams weren't linked because they were linked when I explained the bowl selection process above. Let me know if you still think they should be linked; I was trying to avoid WP:OVERLINKing. –Grondemar 03:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - That's fine; probably forgot they were linked by the time I got to reading that section. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:15, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Pregame buildup

"The turnaround of the Buffalo program brought kudos to Bulls head coach Turner Gill," kudos seems a bit informal.
- I changed "kudos" to "acclaim"; that should be more formal. –Grondemar 12:41, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The Huskies allowed the 10th-fewest yards per game in the nation with 281 yards allowed" Any specific rankings for run and pass defense?
- I'll work on pulling together those numbers and expanding the defense sections in general tonight. –Grondemar 12:45, 29 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - I haven't found anything on run defense yet but I added a couple of sentences on the pass defense; let me know if that works. –Grondemar 02:36, 30 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Game summary

"and punted the ball to Connecticut" link punt, and other terms that non-football fans may not get (i.e. sacked)
- I believe I got them all; let me know if I missed any. –Grondemar 04:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"and settled for a 38-yard Field goal" field goal doesn't need to be capitalized.
- Agreed, fixed. –Grondemar 04:23, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"UConn's turnover woes continued on their next possession, when on their second play from scrimmage after receiving Buffalo's kickoff Tyler Lorenzen was sacked," 'next possession when, on their...kickoff, Tyler'
- Fixed. –Grondemar 04:25, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"punting the ball back to UConn after three plays. The Huskies drove to within the Buffalo 10-yard line;" where'd the Huskies start from?
- I added "Starting from their own 44-yard line,". –Grondemar 04:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Final stats/Aftermath

"with 2,083 rushing yards, best in the nation that year." 'Which led the nation' sounds better.
- Changed as requested. –Grondemar 04:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
What position was Anthony Sherman?
- Fullback. I didn't mention it initially in the passing section as his position is listed a couple of sentences before in the running section; I added the position for consistency. –Grondemar 04:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Misc.

I'm a bit confused as to the point of the group=" " in your references. It could probably be removed without harm unless there's something I'm not seeing. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:26, 30 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Originally I placed the group=" " in the references to segregate them from the endnotes which had group="Note". After removing all the group=" " attributes the page rendered the same, so it turned out as you said that they were not needed. They have been removed. –Grondemar 14:16, 2 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The review is finally done. I'll place this on hold, and will pass it when the final issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:48, 3 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- I believe I have addressed all the issues above, let me know if there are any other changes desired. –Grondemar 05:00, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  Thank you very much for the thorough review! –Grondemar 17:09, 4 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]