Talk:2008 Jerusalem bulldozer attack/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aaron north (talk) 03:52, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review finished, and I made a few minor grammar corrections. This is almost a good article, with just some minor coverage problems that should be easily corrected. I will place this on hold for up to 7 days to allow time to fix the issue. Aaron north (talk) 03:52, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now. Aaron north (talk) 23:45, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

There is only one minor issue that needs to be fixed. As a result of the attack, the home of Hussam Taysir Duwait was demolished by the Israeli Ministry of Defense (MOD). This is indirectly referenced in a quote by Olmert, but this presents an interesting conflict between the desire to have a deterrence, vs the ineffectiveness and a possible human rights violation of collective punishment. This probably should be more prominently written, probably expanding on that first paragraph under "Aftermath". It may be worth another paragraph, at least. After that is done, a brief mention in the lead would also be needed. Aaron north (talk) 05:11, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
You're right, Duwait's house demolition is a glaring omission in the article. I've added the info as suggested. Rami R 19:12, 26 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]