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GA Review

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  • Format the references according to WP:CITE/ES, preferably using {{cite web}}.
  • "effective October 1, 2006. The" – link the year
  • Several paragraphs throughout the article go unreferenced. Please add references where appropriate.

Gary King (talk) 03:39, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have reformatted the references as appropriate ({{cite news}} for online versions of paper publications and {{cite web}} for web-only refs), wikified the unlinked year, and added additional references and inline cites. Jim Miller (talk) 14:04, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The lead will flow better if it was broken up into two paragraphs. For instance, the first paragraph would discuss Background, Causes, and Shutdown, and the second would discuss aftermath-related issues including Post-shutdown governmental action, Effects, and Political influences.
  • "July 4th. The" → "July 4. The" – link it, also. Do this to all the other dates that have superscripts, which are discouraged.

Gary King (talk) 19:09, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Post-shutdown governmental action" almost reads like proseline. Perhaps reword some of the paragraphs.
  • En dashes are required for numerical ranges like "2-1" per WP:DASH
Isn't this example in the article already an en dash? --ZeWrestler Talk 14:46, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Nope. Regular dash is like this: -. En dash is this: –. Em dash is this: —. They increase in length. Gary King (talk) 17:29, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, well it appears that JimMillerJr took care of the example you gave and I took care of a second one in the reference. --ZeWrestler Talk 20:53, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • For times, like "7 a.m.", add the full clock; i.e. "7:00 a.m."

Gary King (talk) 20:23, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Updated the time as requested --ZeWrestler Talk 22:02, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

More comments:

  • "New Jersey Legislature " – "New Jersey (NJ) Legislature " – so that when you use NJ later in the article, people know that's what it means
  • Reword the beginning of the paragraphs in "Post-shutdown governmental action" so that they don't all begin with "On". Perhaps make some of them passive voice, etc.

Gary King (talk) 21:11, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Both issues have been addressed. The rewrite of that section was really needed. Jim Miller (talk) 13:17, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Question Given another edit that was made afterward, might it be better for the flow of the lead section to just remove the later references that say "NJ Legislature", and simply use "legislature" instead? I don't believe that there would be any confusion as to which legislature is being referred to later in the article. Jim Miller (talk) 13:47, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Sure; however, it should probably be capitalized as "the Legislature" since it refers to a specific one. Just for future reference, when an acronym is used in an article, the first time it is used, it needs to explain what it stands for, and in brackets like my example above. Gary King (talk) 21:16, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Are there any updates? Gary King (talk) 05:35, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I believe that all of the raised issues have been addressed at this point. Jim Miller (talk) 06:08, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Many of the references are now missing publishers and access dates. Please add them, per WP:CITE/ES. Gary King (talk) 06:26, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Jim Miller (talk) 15:34, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "State Government - State Constitution. Retrieved on November 14, 2006." – still missing a publisher
  • "№ 17" – try to avoid fancy symbols when possible, so change this to "number 17"
  • "3½%" – "3.5%" – this is so that other people can edit these symbols, and read them, too, since they are not always visible to all devices
  • "on fur clothing[26]; an" – references go after punctuation marks per WP:FN
  • Same for "day[27]; and "
  • Please check the article over one more time for similar issues :)

Gary King (talk) 17:33, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed the noted items. Also adjusted some wording for tense issues, and clarified part of the casino shutdown paragraph. Jim Miller (talk) 18:20, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This article has been an interesting read; I remember hearing about the event and I was surprised. Anyways, this article now meets the Good Article criteria and has therefore passed. Gary King (talk) 18:31, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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